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The rise of large shopping malls, supermarkets have led to decrease the local store, community store and business. Do you think is it positive or negative development

The rise of large shopping malls, supermarkets have led to decrease the local store, community store and business. Do you think is it positive or negative development QRBYK
Nowadays, most of people go shopping in supermarkets to buy things. The others go to buy a fresh ment however, most of them shop at super markets because there have a higher quality. This essay will discuss about pros and cons of this development. On the one hand, the growth of enormous store have effect to people life because they have everything to provide a customers who went to their place. For these days, Corona virus outbreak make people life must be quarantine their self thus, they select to shopping online which department store can do and people can shop like they are in department store because it has virtual supermarket when buying it, the store can delivery to their home. Therefore, the improvement of big shopping malls made people life more comfortable. The rise of shopping malls was due to delivery everywhere. On the other hand, when the large shopping malls have increase, The local market have lower customer because people have gone the department stores because the stores was clean and high quality. From this situation of Covid-19 made people can't go any where hence, income of local store have decrease. The people who sell a thing have he money because local community stores have not deliver to the customer. In conclusion, I would like to say that the growth of large shopping malls have both positive and negative development because it made customer more comfortable and have no risk from Corona virus however, it made customer at local stores went their decrease and mode a sellers have lower income. Consequently, this development has both of pros and cons.
Nowadays, most of
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people
go
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shopping
in supermarkets to
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buy
things. The others go to
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a fresh
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ment
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, most of them shop at super markets
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because
there have a higher quality. This essay will
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discuss about pros
and cons of this development.

On the one hand, the growth of enormous
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store
have effect to
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people
life
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because
they have everything to provide a
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customers
who went to their place. For these days,
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Corona virus
outbreak
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make
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people
life
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must
be quarantine their self
thus
, they select to
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shopping
online which department
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store
can do and
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people
can shop like they are in department
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store
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because
it has virtual supermarket when buying it, the
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store
can delivery to their home.
Therefore
, the improvement of
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big
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shopping
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malls
made
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people
life more comfortable. The rise of
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shopping
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malls
was due to delivery everywhere.
On the other hand
, when the large
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shopping
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malls
have increase, The
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local
market have lower
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customer
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because
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people
have gone the department
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stores
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because
the
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stores
was clean and high quality. From this situation of Covid-19 made
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people
can't go
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any where
hence
, income of
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local
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store
have decrease. The
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people
who sell a thing have
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he money
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local
community
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stores
have not
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deliver
to the
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customer
.
In conclusion
, I would like to say that the growth of large
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shopping
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malls
have both
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positive
and
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negative
development
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because
it made
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customer
more comfortable and have no
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risk
from
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Corona virus
however
, it made
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customer
at
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local
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stores
went their decrease and mode
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a sellers
have lower income.
Consequently
, this development has both of pros and cons.
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IELTS essay The rise of large shopping malls, supermarkets have led to decrease the local store, community store and business. Do you think is it positive or negative development

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  American English
2 paragraphs
271 words
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