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The restoration of old buildings in major cities around the world costs enormous amounts of money. This money would be better spent on providing new housing and road development. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.7

The restoration of old buildings in major cities around the world costs enormous amounts of money. This money would be better spent on providing new housing and road development. v. 7
The cost of restoration of historical or old buildings is quietly high in major cities all around the world. It is believed that this money is may be a good financial support for new construction and roads. I completely agree that new housing and railways are developed besides restoration in below paragraphs. Doubtless, historical buildings are significant to reflect last centuries, not only located place, also in the world. Many of them should be protected by the governments, however financial resources is rather limited recently. Thus, the main choice should be detected in order to develop life standard for the people. That is to say, although how importance reflection of old ages, in the modern life the buildings should be suitable for a healthy growth without traffic congestion or dangerously old flats. For example, municipality of Eskişehir which is the city of Turkey, asked this question to citizens, rebuilding or new roads. The people chosen new ones, to being respectful of history. I strongly agree that the enormous economic expense should be asked as a survey of the individual, and also their's life quality can increase by this capital. On the other hand, the world financial situation is getting worst day by day. The reason of this enormous expense has occurred in useless areas. Some of them, the recovery costs. For example, a ruin has created conveniently as like old in İstanbul, however, honestly, it would be better and all capitals which spent on it was remarkable. If this money would spend at school or new transport area, many people will fall comport. Admittedly, restorations are crıcial for protection our history, but financial circumstances do not permit it. Because of preliminary is significant for the humans. In conclusion, I restate that cost of restorations is highly expensive, so the municipalities or the governments should ask the citizens which one more care about them. In addition, modern buildings and flats, campuses are necessary for everyone supporting by the governments. I strongly agree most of the money should spend for modern life.
The cost of
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restoration
of historical or
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old
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buildings
is
quietly
high in major cities all around the world. It
is believed
that this money is may be a
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good
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financial
support for
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new
construction and roads. I completely
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agree
that
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new
housing and railways
are developed
besides
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restoration
in below paragraphs.

Doubtless, historical
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buildings
are significant to reflect last centuries, not
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only
located place,
also
in the world.
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Many
of them should
be protected
by the
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governments
,
however
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financial
resources is
rather
limited recently.
Thus
, the main choice should
be detected
in order to develop
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life
standard for the
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people
.
That is
to say, although how importance reflection of
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old
ages, in the modern
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life
the
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buildings
should be suitable for a healthy growth without traffic congestion or
dangerously
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old
flats.
For example
, municipality of
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Eskişehir
which is the city of Turkey, asked this question to citizens, rebuilding or
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new
roads. The
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people
chosen
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new
ones, to being respectful of history. I
strongly
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agree
that the enormous economic expense should
be asked
as a survey of the individual, and
also
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their's
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life
quality can increase by this capital.

On the other hand
, the world
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financial
situation is getting
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worst
day by day. The reason of this enormous expense has occurred in useless areas.
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Some
of them, the recovery costs.
For example
, a ruin has created
conveniently
as like
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old
in
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İstanbul
, h
owever,
honestly
, it would be better and all capitals which spent on it was remarkable. If this money
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would spend
at school or
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new
transport area, m
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any
p
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eople
will fall comport. A
dmittedly,
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restorations
are
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crıcial
for protection our history, b
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ut
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financial
circumstances do not permit it. B
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ecause
of preliminary is significant for the humans.

I
n conclusion,
I restate that cost of
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restorations
is
highly
expensive, s
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o
the municipalities or the g
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overnments
should ask the citizens which one more care about them. I
n addition,
modern
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buildings
and flats, campuses are necessary for everyone supporting by the g
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overnments.
I
strongly
a
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gree
most of the money should spend for modern
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life
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS essay The restoration of old buildings in major cities around the world costs enormous amounts of money. This money would be better spent on providing new housing and road development. v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
340 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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