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The restoration of old buildings in major cities around the world costs enormous amounts of money. This money would be better spent on providing new housing and road development. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.3

Over the past few decades, regime of multiple countries splurging exorbitant amount on refurbishment of the heritage premises. However, some people opine that, spending money on building new abode and road infrastructure have more boons. I partially agree with the given assertion. Firstly, antique buildings are the identity of the nations. Not only it represents the country's history but also portrays the culture. Furthermore, our new generations can gain knowledge about their ancestors; they could learn about moral values as well. Apart from this, the unique design and carvings of historic buildings, attract more tourists from the world-wide. Consequently, it would boosts the country's economy as well as tourists could learn about the cultures and history. India, for example, very renowned for its thousand years old discreet temple designs; multifarious holiday-makers from diverse countries visited these buildings, owing to this, the USA- united stated of america, have also commenced the preservation of their old-buildings. On the other hand, the fund should also need to be allocate on the establishment of residence and road infrastructure by the officials in-lieu of only on old buildings. On account of, majority of people are now migrating to developed cities to seek for the new opportunities, it demands more homes for living. Vis-a-vis plethora of people, it would risen the traffic on the road. Thus, it is also quintessential for the authorities to widen the roads in the cities. For instance, Ahemdabad- one of the largest and popular city of India; also has plenty of preserved and well-maintained old buildings. This city is also known for its markets: texttile, auto-accessories, and books. For this reason, many job-seekers moved to this city which caused the traffic pitfall. Therefore, local government had streched the roads as well as built fly-overs on the junction to over-come from the traffic. To recapitulate, renovation o historic building is imperative, to preserve country's history and culture, whereas, entrenching of new buildings and roads is also vital to diminish the traffic and to cope with over-population.
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However
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opine that, spending money on
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building
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new
abode and
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road
infrastructure have more boons. I
partially
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agree
with the
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assertion.

Firstly
, antique
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buildings
are the identity of the nations. Not
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only
it represents the country's history
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but
also
portrays the culture.
Furthermore
, our
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new
generations can gain knowledge about their ancestors; they could learn about moral values
as well
. Apart from this, the unique design and carvings of historic
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buildings
, attract more tourists from the world-wide.
Consequently
, it would
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boosts
the country's economy
as well
as tourists could learn about the cultures and history. India,
for example
,
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very
renowned for its thousand years
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old
discreet temple designs; multifarious holiday-makers from diverse countries visited these
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buildings
, owing to this, the USA- united stated of
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america
, have
also
commenced the preservation of their
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old
-buildings.

On the other hand
, the fund should
also
need to be
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allocate
on the establishment of residence and
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road
infrastructure by the officials in-lieu of
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only
on
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old
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buildings
. On account of,
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majority of
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people
are
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now
migrating to developed
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cities
to seek for the
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new
opportunities, it demands more homes for living.
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plethora of
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, it would
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risen
the traffic on the
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road
.
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, it is
also
quintessential for the authorities to widen the
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roads
in the
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.
For instance
,
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Ahemdabad
- one of the largest and popular city of India;
also
has
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plenty
of preserved and well-maintained
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old
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buildings
. This city is
also
known for its markets:
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texttile
, auto-accessories, and books.
For this reason
,
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many
job-seekers
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moved
to this city which caused the traffic pitfall.
Therefore
, local
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government
had
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streched
the
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roads
as well
as built
fly
-overs on the junction to over-
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come
from the traffic.

To recapitulate, renovation o historic
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building
is imperative, to preserve country's history and culture, whereas, entrenching of
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new
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buildings
and
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roads
is
also
vital to diminish the traffic and to cope with over-population.
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IELTS essay The restoration of old buildings in major cities around the world costs enormous amounts of money. This money would be better spent on providing new housing and road development.

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