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Some people prefer to work in the same type of job throughout their lifetime while others like to change the type of job they do. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.5

Some people prefer to work in the same type of job throughout their lifetime while others like to change the type of job they do. v. 5
Nowadays, most of the people all around the world, love to work in the same job for their entire lifetime, however, some of the humans want to switch to a new profession. In my opinion, pursuing the same career for a long time, might be comfortable in that particular job, but an individual cannot gain knowledge in any other streams. On one hand, people want to be in the same routine since they feel very much comfortable in doing the same work. Additionally, humans don't want to take risk in a new job type and also they believe they may get trapped if they were supposed to involve themselves in a new style of work. Also, they are afraid of the new culture and atmosphere. For example, a person who works as part of the government office, continues to be working there till he/she get his/her retirement. Almost for thirty years they tend to do the same work, it is also quite shocking that they never get bored while doing the job. As a result, money and the comfort which they gained from that particular job forced them to do the same job even for years. On the other hand, some of the mankind wants to get job satisfactions and hence they explore the other jobs and excited in taking up new responsibilities. In addition, they leave the job and invest their earnings in a new profession. For instance, a software engineer who is working as a developer in a reputed organization, wants a new exposure and he invests his earnings in the businesses like real-estate, shopping malls, or at least they tend to open a small shop. By doing this way one can attain knowledge in all the areas. Although, these are giving satisfaction and different exposure to the people, they may not have the job security and the money transition may get fluctuated. To conclude, being on the same job will definitely block your knowledge, while on the other hand, shifting our job type can improve our skills in different streams, since we tend to move to a new career path.
Nowadays, most of the
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all around the world,
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in the same
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for their entire lifetime,
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some of the
humans
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want
to switch to a
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new
profession. In my opinion, pursuing the same career for a long time, might be comfortable in that particular
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job
,
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but
an individual cannot gain knowledge in any
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other
streams.

On one hand,
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people
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want
to be in the same routine since they feel
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very
much comfortable in doing the same
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work
.
Additionally
, humans don't
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want
to take
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risk
in a
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new
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job
type and
also
they believe they may
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get
trapped if they
were supposed
to involve themselves in a
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new
style of
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work
.
Also
, they are afraid of the
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new
culture and atmosphere.
For example
, a person who works as part of the
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government
office, continues to be working there till he/she
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get
his/her retirement. Almost for thirty years they tend to do the same
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work
, it is
also
quite shocking that they never
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get
bored while doing the
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job
.
As a result
, money and the comfort which they gained from that particular
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job
forced them to do the same
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job
even for years.

On the
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other
hand,
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some of the
mankind
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wants
to
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get
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job
satisfactions and
hence
they explore the
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other
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jobs
and excited in taking up
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new
responsibilities.
In addition
, they
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leave
the
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job
and invest their earnings in a
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new
profession.
For instance
, a software engineer who is working as a developer in a reputed organization,
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wants
a
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new
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exposure and
he invests his earnings in the businesses like real-estate, shopping malls, or at least they tend to open a
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small
shop. By doing this way one can attain knowledge in all the areas. Although, these are giving satisfaction and
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different
exposure to the
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people
, they may not have the
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job
security and the money transition may
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get
fluctuated.

To conclude
, being on the same
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job
will definitely block your knowledge, while on the
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other
hand, shifting our
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job
type can
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improve
our
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skills
in
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different
streams, since we tend to
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move
to a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
career path.
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IELTS essay Some people prefer to work in the same type of job throughout their lifetime while others like to change the type of job they do. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
353 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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