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It is thought by some that it's better to live in a city while other believe that life is better in the countryside. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. v.1

It is thought by some that it's better to live in a city while other believe that life is better in the countryside. v. 1
In the modern era, it has become increasingly common that the majority of people move to cities for a better career prospects. Certain folks opine that it is crucial to live in urban areas for better career growth. However, others believe that it is better to reside in remote areas. In this essay, I will discuss both the perspectives and provide my opinion. There is a plethora of benefits associated with living in urban areas. Firstly, In the urban areas, there is no dearth of jobs for any sector because of which the unemployment rate is very low. Furthermore, health facilities are available round the clock with the latest technologies help in treating the critical diseases such as cancer. In addition to, teenagers can get a better education because of worldwide teaching standards. For example, In a recent survey by the Indian Government, it has been observed that the children who are educated in cities have better intelligence and intellectual skills as compared to students educated countryside. On the other side, there is a host of advantages associated with living in countryside. To begin with, remote areas have lots of open spaces because of which people can grow vegetables without the insecticide and pesticides. Furthermore, village life is free from all kinds of pollution and thus, providing fresh air and water for living a healthy life. To Illustrate, according to data from the health department of India, it has been found that persons who are living in cities are prone to many diseases due to pollution and unhealthy lifestyle while folks living in the villages are very fit physically as well as mentally. To conclude, In my opinion living in cities is the need of the hour because of more Job opportunities and better education standards.
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increasingly
common that the majority of
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people
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move
to
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cities
for a
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better
career prospects. Certain folks opine that it is crucial to
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live
in urban
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areas
for
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better
career growth.
However
, others believe that it is
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better
to reside in remote
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areas
. In this essay, I will discuss both the perspectives and provide my opinion.

There is a plethora of benefits associated with
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living
in urban
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.
Firstly
, In the urban
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areas
, there is no dearth of jobs for any sector
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because
of which the unemployment rate is
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very
low.
Furthermore
, health facilities are available round the clock with the latest technologies
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help
in treating the critical diseases such as cancer.
In addition
to,
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teenagers
can
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get
a
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better
education
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because
of worldwide teaching standards.
For example
, In a recent survey by the Indian
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Government
, it has
been observed
that the children who
are educated
in
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cities
have
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better
intelligence and intellectual
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skills
as compared to students educated countryside.

On the other side, there is a host of advantages associated with
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living
in countryside. To
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begin
with, remote
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areas
have lots of open spaces
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because
of which
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people
can grow vegetables without the insecticide and pesticides.
Furthermore
, village life is free from all kinds of pollution and
thus
, providing fresh air and water for
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living
a healthy life. To Illustrate, according to data from the health department of India, it has
been found
that persons who are
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living
in
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cities
are prone to
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many
diseases due to pollution and unhealthy lifestyle while folks
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living
in the villages are
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very
fit
physically
as well
as mentally.

To conclude
, In my opinion
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living
in
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cities
is the need of the hour
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because
of more Job opportunities and
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better
education standards.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay It is thought by some that it's better to live in a city while other believe that life is better in the countryside. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
296 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
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Task Achievement: 8.0
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