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Modern building change the character and appearance of towns and cities. The government should insist that new buildings be built in traditional styles to protect cultural identity. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

Modern building change the character and appearance of towns and cities. The government should insist that new buildings be built in traditional styles to protect cultural identity. v. 2
Over the last decade, there has been a change in the design and appearance of buildings around the world. Some people believe that it should be constructed in a traditional style to preserve their cultural heritage. In my opinion, I completely disagree with this view because culture is dynamic, and would discourage new innovations. culture is not static. The current look of structures in the countryside is not the same centuries ago. Houses were built with clay or plant leaves, and today it is with cement or bricks. For example, in 1884 houses but in rural areas were made of mud and bamboo. If we prevent the building with modern designs we will be limiting our abilities to develop culture, and this would hinder growth. To encourage new ideas, people should be allowed to construct buildings to have a modern appearance. Also, the new look helps us to differentiate the cities from the rural areas. Moreover, these innovations result from tackling challenges face the some regions. For instance, in Lagos, skyscrapers are built to help overcome the limited land available. And if the introduction of new technology were discouraged it would be impossible to solve this problem. In conclusion. although some people think that to protect their cultural identity the government should enforce designs of build be made in traditional style, I believe that it is has a negative effect on society. That means this would discourage people from developing new ideas, and there would be no growth in our culture.
Over the last decade, there has been a
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change
in the design and appearance of buildings around the world.
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Some
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people
believe that it should
be constructed
Consider replacing "in a traditional style" with the adverb for "traditional"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a traditional style
to preserve their cultural heritage. In my opinion, I completely disagree with this view
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because
culture is dynamic, and would discourage
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new
innovations.

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culture
is not static. The
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current
look of structures in the countryside is not the same centuries ago.
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Houses
were built
with clay or plant
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leaves
, and
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today
it is with cement or bricks.
For example
, in 1884
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houses
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but
in rural areas
were made
of mud and bamboo. If we
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prevent
the building with modern designs we will be limiting our abilities to develop culture, and this would hinder growth.

To encourage
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new
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ideas
,
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people
should be
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allowed
to construct buildings to have a modern appearance.
Also
, the
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new look
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helps
us to differentiate the cities from the rural areas.
Moreover
, these innovations result from tackling challenges face the
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some
regions.
For instance
, in Lagos, skyscrapers
are built
to
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help
overcome the limited land available. And if the introduction of
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new
technology
were discouraged
it would be impossible to solve this problem.

In conclusion
.
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although
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some
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people
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think
that to protect their cultural identity the
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government
should enforce designs of build
be made
in traditional style, I believe that it is has a
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negative
effect on society. That means this would discourage
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people
from developing
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new
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ideas
, and there would be no growth in our culture.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Modern building change the character and appearance of towns and cities. The government should insist that new buildings be built in traditional styles to protect cultural identity. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
251 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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