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The recent popularity of online shopping will result in the end of high street shops. To what extent do you agree or disagree. v.4

The recent popularity of online shopping will result in the end of high street shops. v. 4
Shopping has become more convenient by introducing online shopping facility. Many people nowadays prefer to buy online instead of going to a shop and buy their regular groceries. Some argue that due to this high street will lose their significance and closed down. I am of opinion that the high street will still be a popular choice amongst people who go for shopping for two reasons. Firstly, many people prefer to buy through going to a shop because they want to feel and touch the product. Shopping online do not give you the real feel of shopping, means the item which we are to buy, we can order by click of a button. Although there is convenience of buying a product online, there are products which we cannot judge without touching them. For example, buying clothing is very confusing when we buy from a website. One is not able to get the idea that what is the quality of the cloth and whether it will suit on them. Due to this I concede that high street shopping will still be an option. Secondly, buying from a shop is always a first option when you need a product immediately. Although today many online shops give option of free delivery and free return, it takes time to get delivered an item. When people are in an urgent need of something, they prefer to go to a shop and get it. For example, when one needs to buy his medical prescription, he has to go to the chemist. In conclusion, although there are number of advantages to buy from online, high streets give such experience and ease of shopping that no other means can. Therefore, I believe that it will not fade away.
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Shopping
has become more convenient by introducing
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online
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shopping
facility.
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Many
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people
nowadays prefer to
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buy
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online
instead
of going to a
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shop
and
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buy
their regular groceries.
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Some
argue that due to this
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high
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street
will lose their significance and closed down. I am of opinion that the
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high
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street
will
still
be a popular choice amongst
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people
who go for
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shopping
for two reasons.

Firstly
,
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many
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people
prefer to
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buy
through going to a
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shop
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because
they want to feel and touch the
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product
.
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Shopping
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online
do not give you the real feel of
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shopping
, means the item which we are to
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buy
, we can order by click of a button. Although there is convenience of buying a
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product
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online
, there are
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products
which we cannot judge without touching them.
For example
, buying clothing is
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very
confusing when we
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buy
from a website. One is not able to
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get
the
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idea
that what is the quality of the cloth and whether it will suit on them. Due to this I concede that
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high
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street
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shopping
will
still
be an option.

Secondly
, buying from a
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shop
is always a
first
option when you need a
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product
immediately. Although
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today
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many
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online
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shops
give option of free delivery and free return, it takes time to
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get
delivered an item. When
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people
are in an urgent need of something, they prefer to go to a
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shop
and
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get
it.
For example
, when one needs to
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buy
his medical prescription, he
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has to
go to the chemist.

In conclusion
, although there are number of advantages to
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buy
from
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online
,
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high
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streets
give such experience and
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ease
of
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shopping
that no other means can.
Therefore
, I believe that it will not fade away.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
41Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay The recent popularity of online shopping will result in the end of high street shops. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
290 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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