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THE REASON OF CHOOSING EY

THE REASON OF CHOOSING EY ELK2b
There are 3 factors which make me choose EY. First, EY is one of the biggest audit company not only in Viet Nam but also all over the world. And my major is accounting so applying to EY is my best selection. Second, last week EY collaborate with the accounting and auditing club of my university to organize the webinar for the internship program. I had the chance to exchange & learn from the Manager of EY HCM. I extremely admire Mr Pham Xuan Tuan and Ms Ho Thuy Linh. They are very open minded, nice and They are also the successful people. And I think all the staff of EY Viet Nam are the wonderful people. It’s my honor if I have the opportunities to work at EY. Final, EY HCM’s official office is located at Bitexco Tower which is the most crowded and modern area in HCM city. Therefore, I like EY best among 4 big firms and I hope to work at your company.
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collaborate with the accounting and auditing club of my university to organize the webinar for the internship program. I had the chance to exchange & learn from the Manager of
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best among 4
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IELTS essay THE REASON OF CHOOSING EY

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
167 words
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