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. The reading states asteroids are better options for colonization and supports its suggestion using an array of reasons. On the contrary, the lecturer cites three reasons to reject the points in the reading.

Humans have dreamt about living out of the earth from ancient centuries. They consider the moon and Mars as appropriate candidates. The reading states asteroids are better options for colonization and supports its suggestion using an array of reasons. On the contrary, the lecturer cites three reasons to reject the points in the reading. First, the writer explains asteroids enjoy low gravity. The low gravity is beneficial for spacecraft landing and taking off, due to the fact, they need less power. In addition, they would be able to transfer more equipment which they need to build the colonies on the asteroid. Conversely, the lecturer argues low gravity results in health problems for people who will live on the asteroids. Low gravity leads to decreases in bone density and losses muscle mass. Second, the writer believes asteroids are thriving of raw materials and cherished metals, for example, gold and platinum. The sponsors can bring these materials to the earth and raise money for the expanses. In contrast, the lecturer declares costs for transporting the raw material to the earth are high. In addition, if the supply of material, such as gold, increases, as a result, its price will reduce in the market. Consequently, the mining and transporting of these materials will not be economical. Finally, the writer claims since asteroids occasionally get close to the earth they are more reachable than planets, for instance, Mars, which it takes two years to travel to there. However, the professor argues returning from an asteroid to the earth is complicated. In fact, asteroids' orbital paths are sometimes far away from the earth, and this long distance is a challenge. To conclude, the writer believes asteroids are a better option rather than Mars and the moon and provides a number of reasons to support it. However, the speaker opposes the idea about colonization on asteroids using several reasons and examples.
Humans have dreamt about living out of the
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earth
from ancient centuries. They consider the moon and Mars as appropriate candidates. The reading states
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asteroids
are better options for colonization and supports its suggestion using an array of
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reasons
.
On the contrary
, the lecturer cites three
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reasons
to reject the points in the reading.

First
, the
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writer
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explains
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asteroids
enjoy
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low
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gravity
. The
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low
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gravity
is beneficial for spacecraft landing and taking off, due to the fact, they need less power.
In addition
, they would be able to transfer more equipment which they need to build the colonies on the
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asteroid
.
Conversely
, the lecturer argues
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low
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gravity
results in health problems for
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people
who will
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live
on the
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asteroids
.
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Low
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gravity
leads to decreases in bone density and losses muscle mass.

Second, the
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writer
believes
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asteroids
are thriving of raw
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materials
and cherished metals,
for example
, gold and platinum. The sponsors can bring these
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materials
to the
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earth
and raise money for the expanses.
In contrast
, the lecturer declares costs for transporting the raw
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material
to the
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earth
are high.
In addition
, if the supply of
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material
, such as gold, increases,
as a result
, its price will
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reduce
in the market.
Consequently
, the mining and transporting of these
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materials
will not be economical.

Finally
, the
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writer
claims since
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asteroids
occasionally
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get
close to the
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earth
they are more reachable than planets,
for instance
, Mars, which it takes two years to travel to there.
However
, the professor argues returning from an
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asteroid
to the
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earth
is complicated
. In fact, asteroids' orbital paths are
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sometimes
far away from the
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earth
, and this long distance is a challenge.

To conclude
, the
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writer
believes
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asteroids
are a better option
rather
than Mars and the moon and provides a number of
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reasons
to support it.
However
, the speaker opposes the
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idea
about colonization on
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asteroids
using several
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reasons
and examples.
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IELTS essay . The reading states asteroids are better options for colonization and supports its suggestion using an array of reasons. On the contrary, the lecturer cites three reasons to reject the points in the reading.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
315 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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