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The reading passage states that the vessels that were discovered at Iraq may have not been used as electric batteries in ancient times, and gives several reasons to explain.

The reading passage states that the vessels that were discovered at Iraq may have not been used as electric batteries in ancient times, and gives several reasons to explain. oRDd3
The reading passage states that the vessels that were discovered at Iraq may have not been used as electric batteries in ancient times, and gives several reasons to explain. However, the professor disagrees and opposes the points that the reading provides. First, the reading states that it’s impossible that the vessels were used as batteries because there is no electric conductor such as metal wire. However, the lectures argues that it’s possible and the explanation is that these vessels were found by local people who were not expert, so chance is they would miss some parts of the vessels that might be the electric conductor and then these people might throw them away. Second, the reading mentions that the copper cylinders that contained inside the vessels were the same shape as the copper cylinders that were discovered at the city nearby which served a function as a tool for holding scroll. So these vessels must be the same and must not be electric batteries. For this point, the speaker agree that it’s true in some points, however, the iron and clay inside the vessel could be applied for generate electricity, and adapted for another usage. Finally, the reading proposes that there is no reason to have electric batteries at that time since there were not any devices to use. In contrast, the professor clarifies that actually this electric vessels could generate a mild energy and could cause a mild shock and people would think that it’s a magic power. Moreover, since today we use electric shock for medication purpose, then the ancient people may use it for healing same as nowadays.
The
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passage states that the
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vessels
that
were discovered
at Iraq may have not been
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used
as
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electric
batteries in ancient times, and gives several reasons to
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explain
.
However
, the professor disagrees and opposes the points that the
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reading
provides.

First
, the
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reading
states that it’s impossible that the
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vessels
were
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used
as batteries
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because
there is no
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electric
conductor such as metal wire.
However
, the lectures argues that it’s possible and the explanation is that these
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vessels
were found
by local
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people
who were not expert,
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so
chance is they would miss
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some
parts of the
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vessels
that might be the
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electric
conductor and then these
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people
might throw them away.

Second, the
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reading
mentions that the copper cylinders that contained inside the
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vessels
were the same shape as the copper cylinders that
were discovered
at the city nearby which served a function as a tool for holding scroll.
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So
these
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vessels
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must
be the same and
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must
not be
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electric
batteries. For this point, the speaker
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agree
that it’s true in
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some
points,
however
, the iron and clay inside the
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vessel
could
be applied
for generate electricity, and adapted for another usage.

Finally
, the
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reading
proposes that there is no reason to have
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electric
batteries at that time since there were not any devices to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
.
In contrast
, the professor clarifies that actually this
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electric
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vessels
could generate a mild energy and could cause a mild shock and
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people
would
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think
that it’s a magic power.
Moreover
, since
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today
we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
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electric
shock for medication purpose, then the ancient
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people
may
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
it for healing same as nowadays.
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IELTS essay The reading passage states that the vessels that were discovered at Iraq may have not been used as electric batteries in ancient times, and gives several reasons to explain.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
271 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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