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The reading passage and the lecture both discusses about the possible explanation to the decline of sea otters.

The reading passage and the lecture both discusses about the possible explanation to the decline of sea otters. Dla97
The reading passage and the lecture both discusses about the possible explanation to the decline of sea otters. According to the passage the root cause to this rapid decline is environmental pollution. In contrast, professor believes that this is caused due to attacks by predators. She proves her point by refuting each of the claims made in the reading. First reason passage provides is there can be found sources of pollutants along the Alaskans coast, like oil rigs and there for argues that this environmental hazard is due to the pollution. Professor disagree with this point by stating that, there should be dead bodies of sea otters if they were died due to pollution and there is no such evidence has been found up to date. Furthermore she argues that this is due to predators hunt them and they eat them. She states that this coincide with the evidence found. Secondly, passage states that there is a decline in other sea mammals and this can only possible if the pollution hypothesis is true. However professor states that, this declination can explain by predatory behavior of Orca. With the disappearance of whales, orca used to hunt other sea mammals and she claims that this explains the reason for declination of whole sea mammals. Finally, reading explains about the uneven pattern of otter decline can be explained using pollution hypothesis and states that this is due to non-uniform distribution of pollutant. The professor contradicts with this point by saying that this pattern is not random. Moreover she explains that shallow sea do not show decline and other areas show rapid decline. She argue that this is due to predators like orca are significantly large animals and therefore they hunts only in non shallow regions. In conclusion, the passage and lecture both try to prove two contradictory theories to explain declination of sea otters. Reading supports the pollution hypothesis, meanwhile professor champion predatory hypothesis.
The reading
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passage
and the lecture both discusses about the possible explanation to the
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decline
of
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sea
otters. According to the
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passage
the root cause to this rapid
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decline
is environmental
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pollution
.
In contrast
,
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professor
believes that this
is caused
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due
to attacks by predators. She proves her point by refuting each of the claims made in the reading.

First
reason
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passage
provides is there can
be found
sources of pollutants along the Alaskans coast, like oil rigs and there for argues that this environmental hazard is
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due
to the
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pollution
.
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Professor
disagree with this point by stating that, there should be dead bodies of
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sea
otters if they were
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died
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due
to
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pollution
and there is no such evidence has
been found
up to date.
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Furthermore
she argues that this is
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due
to predators hunt
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them and
they eat them. She
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states
that
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this coincide
with the evidence found.

Secondly
,
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passage
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states
that there is a
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decline
in other
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sea
mammals and this can
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only
possible if the
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pollution
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hypothesis
is true.
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However
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professor
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states
that, this declination can
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explain
by predatory behavior of Orca. With the disappearance of whales, orca
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used
to hunt other
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sea
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mammals and
she claims that this
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explains
the reason for declination of whole
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sea
mammals.

Finally
, reading
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explains
about the uneven pattern of otter
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decline
can be
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explained
using
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pollution
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hypothesis
and
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states
that this is
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due
to non-uniform distribution of pollutant. The
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professor
contradicts with this point by saying that this pattern is not random.
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Moreover
she
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explains
that shallow
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sea
do not
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show
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decline
and other areas
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show
rapid
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decline
. She
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argue
that this is
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due
to predators like orca are
significantly
large animals and
therefore
they
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hunts
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only
in
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non shallow
regions.

In conclusion
, the
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passage
and lecture both try to prove two contradictory theories to
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explain
declination of
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sea
otters. Reading supports the
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pollution
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hypothesis
, meanwhile
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professor
champion predatory
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hypothesis
.

IELTS essay The reading passage and the lecture both discusses about the possible explanation to the decline of sea otters.

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