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The rapid change of the world in twenty recent years take all of the ways we live, work and study

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The rapid change of the world in twenty recent years take all of the ways we live, work and study. Hence, Education is not a exception. With short terms of this article, we just can discuss about a small aspect that is universities administration store their elite knowledge by documents and their studies which they collect along their history. Library always is the most important facility of any university, because of it not only store tremendous basic knowledge of the scientific world but also contains thousands of exclusive research belong them. A student perhaps spend almost his time in library rather than class or anywhere else. The vast technology revolution of 21th century has changed dramatically everything, many of textbooks have replaced by hardware, the monitors replace to hundreds of wood shelf and rows of wood rack. Of course, both teacher and student can quickly access to necessary information as easy as possible, even just by some typing. On the other hand, modern computer also connect knowledge between different disciplines by rapid time. Nevertheless, everything always have restricts belong itself. In this case, I merely mention about the security of exclusive studies that biggest property of each university. Digital development go hand in hand with technology crime. Therefore, we not only concentrate to improve the speed to absorb knowledge but also have to struggle to keep it safe against numerous hacker is stalking constantly. In the conclusion, everything always have two face of itself. We will never a perfect solutions to solve both of problems. All of infrastructures should to keep the balance between super convenience of modern machine and the absolute safety of traditional textbooks.
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change
of the world in twenty recent years take
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all of the
ways we
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live
, work and study.
Hence
, Education is not
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a
exception. With short terms of this article, we
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discuss about a
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small
aspect
that is
universities administration store their elite
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knowledge
by documents and their studies which they collect along their history.

Library
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always is
the most
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important
facility of any university,
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because
of it not
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only
store tremendous basic
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knowledge
of the scientific world
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but
also
contains thousands of exclusive research belong them. A student perhaps spend almost his time in library
rather
than
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class
or anywhere else. The vast technology revolution of
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21th
century has
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changed
dramatically
everything,
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many
of textbooks have replaced by hardware, the monitors replace to hundreds of wood shelf and rows of wood rack.
Of course
, both teacher and student can
quickly
access to necessary information as easy as possible, even
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just
by
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some
typing.
On the other hand
, modern computer
also
connect
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knowledge
between
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different
disciplines by rapid time.
Nevertheless
, everything
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always have restricts
belong itself.
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, I
merely
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mention about the
security of exclusive studies that biggest property of each university. Digital development go hand in hand with technology crime.
Therefore
, we not
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only
concentrate to
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improve
the speed to absorb
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knowledge
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but
also
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have to
struggle to
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keep
it safe against numerous hacker is stalking
constantly
.

In the conclusion, everything always have
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two face
of itself. We will never a perfect
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solutions
to solve both of problems.
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All of infrastructures
should to
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keep
the balance between super convenience of modern machine and the absolute safety of traditional textbooks.
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IELTS essay The rapid change of the world in twenty recent years take all of the ways we live, work and study

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276 words
6.0
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