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task 2 Recently, the individiuals who are older than 65 years old, are still permitted to labour until they make the decision to stop that happen in a number of nations. From my perspective, I strongly believe that the obstacles outnumber the benefits.

task 2 Recently, the individiuals who are older than 65 years old, are still permitted to labour until they make the decision to stop that happen in a number of nations. From my perspective, I strongly believe that the obstacles outnumber the benefits. d3qjo
Recently, the individiuals who are older than 65 years old, are still permitted to labour until they make the decision to stop that happen in a number of nations. From my perspective, I strongly believe that the obstacles outnumber the benefits. On the one hand, the elderly those still working, they tend to feel more active and enjoy the life with the positive thinking. Citing the quotes “Labouring is the happiness” so that whenever we could work, we are going to be beneficial and independent. For instance, the old people who continue to labour, they certainly earn a living, pay for fee on daily basis or even spend their own expenditures instead of staying at home and looking forward to their pensions or subsides from government. On the other hand, the disappearance of the labour law for the senior citizens is attributable for some potential consequences. Firstly, the state-owned fund also have the duty to invest a large number of pensions for the senior dwellers without their contributions or their taxes. Secondly, the productivity in each corporations is on the decline due to the degradation in the elderly’s health and in return. Example, working when you are too old could result in some heath issues such as cardiovascular diseases or the stroke. In conclusion, the legislation about the labouring of senior residents could totally lead to more demerits than the advantages that bring out.
Recently, the
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individiuals
who are older than 65 years
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
, are
still
permitted to
Possible spelling mistake. 'labour' is British English.
labour
until they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the decision to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
that happen in a number of nations. From my perspective, I
strongly
believe that the obstacles outnumber the benefits.

On the one hand, the elderly those
still
working, they tend to feel more active and enjoy the life with the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
thinking. Citing the quotes “
Possible spelling mistake. 'Labouring' is British English.
Labouring
is the happiness”
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that whenever we could work, we are going to be beneficial and independent.
For instance
, the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
who continue to
Possible spelling mistake. 'labour' is British English.
labour
, they
certainly
earn a living, pay for fee on daily basis or even spend their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
expenditures
instead
of staying at home and looking forward to their pensions or subsides from
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
.

On the other hand
, the disappearance of the
Possible spelling mistake. 'labour' is British English.
labour
law for the senior citizens is attributable for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
potential consequences.
Firstly
, the state-
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
owned
fund
also
have the duty to invest
Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use "many" or "numerous"
a large number of
pensions for the senior dwellers without their contributions or their taxes.
Secondly
, the productivity in each
The noun should be probably in the singular form: "corporation"?
corporations
is on the decline due to the degradation in the elderly’s health and in return. Example, working when you are too
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
could result in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
heath issues such as cardiovascular diseases or the stroke.

In conclusion
, the legislation about the
Possible spelling mistake. 'labouring' is British English.
labouring
of senior residents could
totally
lead to more demerits than the advantages that bring out.
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IELTS essay task 2 Recently, the individiuals who are older than 65 years old, are still permitted to labour until they make the decision to stop that happen in a number of nations. From my perspective, I strongly believe that the obstacles outnumber the benefits.

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