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The range of technology available to people is increasing the gap between the rich and the poor. Others think it has an opposite effect. Discuss both views and give opinions. v.5

The range of technology available to people is increasing the gap between the rich and the poor. Others think it has an opposite effect. v. 5
Some people believe that different types of technology result to vast disparities between rich users and poor user; whilst others take the view that it makes a positive effect. From my perspective, it is true that this gap is being increased due to technological developments. It is clear that people having high living-standard accessed to technological world long time ago. The latest smartphones, the newest laptops, wireless broadband Internet are common in developed countries. It enable these people to work at home or anywhere in the world as long as there is wireless fidelity in this place, they also do shopping online and wait for shops sending products directly to their addresses; whereas citizens in poor countries just afford to buy old mobile phones or laptops or some technique On the other hand, thanks to developments of technology, poor residents in developing or under developing nations could be able to access to the Internet and broaden their knowledge outside of their countries. For example, in the past, only people in the developed nations accessed to world-class libraries; however, Internet allows everyone despite rich one or poor one to have accession to the same materials. In conclusion, though there are some benefits from technological developments, I strongly believe that the range of technology available makes the gap become larger and larger.
Some
people
believe that
different
types of technology result to vast disparities between rich users and
poor
user; whilst others take the view that it
makes
a
positive
effect. From my perspective, it is true that this gap is
being increased
due to technological developments.

It is
clear
that
people
having high living-standard accessed to technological world long time ago. The latest smartphones, the newest laptops, wireless broadband Internet are common in
developed countries
. It
enable
these
people
to work at home or anywhere in the world as long as there is wireless fidelity in this place, they
also
do shopping
online and wait for shops sending products
directly
to their addresses; whereas citizens in
poor
countries
just
afford to
buy
old
mobile phones or laptops or
some
technique


On the other hand
, thanks to developments of technology,
poor
residents in developing or under developing nations could be able to access to the Internet and broaden their knowledge
outside of
their countries.
For example
, in the past,
only
people
in the developed nations accessed to world-
class
libraries;
however
, Internet
allows
everyone despite rich one or
poor
one to have accession to the same materials.

In conclusion
, though there are
some
benefits from technological developments, I
strongly
believe that the range of technology available
makes
the gap become larger and larger.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay The range of technology available to people is increasing the gap between the rich and the poor. Others think it has an opposite effect. v. 5

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