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The qualities and skills that people require to be successful in today’s world cannot be learned at university or at other academic institutions. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

The qualities and skills that people require to be successful in today’s world cannot be learned at university or at other academic institutions. v. 1
It is thought by some people that the abilities needed to flourish in today’s world cannot be acquired at academic institutions, while others tend to disagree. In my opinion, while the specific skills one learns at university such as tenacity and time management are important, the school of life teaches us lessons that are more widely applicable, such as effective communication and stress management. It can be argued that attending university teaches us many skills necessary for succeeding in today’s world, such as meeting deadlines and completing tasks regardless of our personal interest in them. Academia is highly organised and demanding, and asks an individual to complete a variety of tasks in a short amount of time. This teaches one to be methodical, and to prioritize tasks as well as the efforts we invest in them. Attending university also curbs our tendency to avoid unappealing tasks, which helps develop maturity and perseverance in a student. Thus, in the future, when faced with uninspiring or routine work, the individual is able to focus and complete the task at hand within the stipulated time. However, in order to thrive in our society, practical skills learnt in the real world, such as effective communication, and stress management – are equally, if not more important. The ability to exchange information with people from diverse backgrounds and viewpoints effectively, without any misunderstandings, is invaluable, as it is something we utilize almost constantly. Perhaps most importantly, with the multitude of roles any individual plays in society, managing the stress engendered by them is crucial. Managing one’s stress is highly individualistic, and people try out various methods over a long period of time before concluding what works best for them. For example. listening to music might help alleviate stress for some, while for others, practicing meditation might be key. In my opinion, without the skills we learn in our daily lives, we cannot fully utilize the one’s learnt via universities, thus rendering them more important. To recapitulate, while attending university instills vital skills such as time management and tenacity in people, in my opinion, the abilities we acquire in the course of our daily lives, such as communication and stress management, are of greater importance. These skills help us to capitalize on our technical skills and abilities.
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such as tenacity and
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important
, the school of life teaches us lessons that are more
widely
applicable, such as effective communication and
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stress
management.

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be argued
that attending
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university
teaches us
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many
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skills
necessary for succeeding in
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today
’s world, such as meeting deadlines and completing
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tasks
regardless of our personal interest in them. Academia is
highly
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organised
and demanding, and asks an individual to complete a variety of
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tasks
in a short amount of
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time
. This teaches one to be methodical, and to prioritize
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tasks
as well
as the efforts we invest in them. Attending
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university
also
curbs our tendency to avoid unappealing
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tasks
, which
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helps
develop maturity and perseverance in a student.
Thus
, in the future, when faced with uninspiring or routine work, the individual is able to focus and complete the
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task
at hand within the stipulated time.

However
, in order to thrive in our society, practical
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skills
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learnt
in the real world, such as effective communication, and
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stress
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management
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are
equally
, if not more
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important
. The
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ability
to exchange information with
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people
from diverse backgrounds and viewpoints
effectively
, without any misunderstandings, is invaluable, as it is something we utilize almost
constantly
. Perhaps most
importantly
, with the multitude of roles any individual plays in society, managing the
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stress
engendered by them is crucial. Managing one’s
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stress
is
highly
individualistic, and
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people
try out various methods over a long period of
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time
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before
concluding what works best for them.
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listening
to music might
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help
alleviate
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stress
for
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some
, while for others, practicing meditation might be key. In my opinion, without the
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skills
we learn in our daily
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, we cannot
fully
utilize the one’s
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,
thus
rendering them more
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important
.

To recapitulate, while attending
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university
instills vital
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skills
such as
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time
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management
and tenacity in
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people
, in my opinion, the
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abilities
we acquire in the course of our daily
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lives
, such as communication and
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stress
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management
, are of greater importance. These
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skills
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help
us to capitalize on our technical
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skills
and
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abilities
.
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39Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay The qualities and skills that people require to be successful in today’s world cannot be learned at university or at other academic institutions. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
380 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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