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The process shows ways to elaborate the production of cement and concrete

The process shows ways to elaborate the production of cement and concrete 9a3xW
The supplied process illustrates information in steps to make cement and in percentage to make concrete. Overall, the cement production consists of six stages while the concrete production only consists of three. First of all, the limestone and clay are put together in a crusher in which they will become powder due to the pression. Next, they will go to a mixer where everything will be unified, after that they are taken to a rotating heater, there the mix will spin being flamed by heat. When the mix has finished being heated it will be placed above some grinders where cement will be obtained and finally, they are packed in bags. The following production begins with mixing 15% of cement and adding 10% of water. Subsequently, we will add to the mix 25% of sand and 50% of gravel (which are small stones). This will be placed in a Concrete mixer which will spin to make the mix more unified.
The supplied process illustrates information in steps to
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make
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cement
and in percentage to
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make
concrete.

Overall
, the
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cement
production consists of six stages while the concrete production
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only
consists of three.

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First of all
, the limestone and clay
are put
together in a crusher in which they will become powder due to the
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pression
.
Next
, they will go to a mixer where everything will
be unified
, after that they
are taken
to a rotating heater, there the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
mix
will spin
being flamed
by heat. When the
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mix
has finished
being heated
it will
be placed
above
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some
grinders where
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cement
will
be obtained
and
finally
, they
are packed
in bags.

The following production
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begins
with mixing 15% of
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cement
and adding 10% of water.
Subsequently
, we will
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add
to the
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mix
25% of sand and 50% of gravel (which are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
stones). This will
be placed
in a Concrete mixer which will spin to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the
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mix
more unified.
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IELTS essay The process shows ways to elaborate the production of cement and concrete

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  American English
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160 words
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