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The process shows diamonds moving from the mine to the retailer

The process shows diamonds moving from the mine to the retailer MonJk

The flowchart explain the way in which Diamonds are moved from a mine to those who are selling them. First of all, rough diamonds are mined and sorted into two groups. Where, the low grade diamonds are used in industrial purpose. After that, they are cut and shaped, diamonds then sent for checked their level of hardness. Finally, before sent to retailers they are priced. On the contrary, high grade diamonds are being used in cosmetic. They are priced before sent them for analysing by the computer for best cut. In the next stage, they are sent to be not only by hand, but also by machine. Following this, diamonds are polished and depend on rating are either return for further policing, or direct send to the retailers. Overall, the process consists of a number of stages, as they begins with the mining and ending with the same to the retailers.

The flowchart Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: "explains".explains
explain
 the way in which You use this word too often, consider replacing it withjewelgemrhinestone
Diamonds
 are This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :relocated
moved
 from a mine to those who are selling them.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".First
First of all
, rough You use this word too often, consider replacing it withjewelgemrhinestone
diamonds
are mined
 and sorted into two groups. “Where” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Where
, the low grade You use this word too often, consider replacing it withjewelgemrhinestone
diamonds
 are This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploited
used
 in industrial purpose. After that, they are This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :minimize
cut
 and shaped, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withjewelgemrhinestone
diamonds
 then This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :transmitted
sent
 for This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :monitored
checked
 their level of hardness. Finally
, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:previouslyprior to
before
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :transmitted
sent
 to retailers they are priced
.

On the contrary
, high grade You use this word too often, consider replacing it withjewelgemrhinestone
diamonds
 are being This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploited
used
 in cosmetic. They are priced
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:previouslyprior to
before
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :transmitted
sent
 them for Possible spelling mistake. 'analysing' is British English.analyzing
analysing
 by the computer for best This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :minimize
cut
. In the next
 stage, they are This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :transmitted
sent
 to be not This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
 by hand, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
also
 by machine. Following this, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withjewelgemrhinestone
diamonds
are polished
 and depend on rating are either return for further
 policing, or direct This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :transmit
send
 to the retailers.

Overall
, the process consists of a number of stages, as they The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: "begin"begin
begins
 with the mining and ending with the same to the retailers. 