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The idea, that these days we are faced with much more choices to choose from, has its own proponents. Personally I see very different reasons that make this this statement is legitimate and reliable, based on social characteristics of the modern life. When the subject of study is a society and millieu, that people live in, one of the predominant factors that comes into mind, is population and the rate it changes through time. It is not a surprise, that the global population has been increasing since the past two millenia, according to available data. And subsequently the more the numbers of people grow, the more diversity emerges and new ways of living become prevalant. It can be studied that with the as these increasing trends of population growth become stronger, socities change at the same time to be able to keep up with changing demands of their poeple. Different people tend to choose different ways of living, different customes, different norms, different rules, different religions, and with all these diversities comes an everchanging choices to pick from. As the increase in the global population was introduced as one of the most substantial characteristics of the life on earth, the relation and forms of communication between people has changed dramatically as well. As it can be seen, studying humanity in twentieth century, communication between people has changed in an undeniable fashion. The more people get in touch togheter, the more they become aware of their points of view and their different ways of living. Nowadays modern man is immersed in an omnipresent flux of information; Exposure to these enormous amounts of data, which a huge part of them is related to other people and partly their different choices and their different ways of living, will definitely broaden the options and choices that one might select from; For some, it might become a dillema or an impasse to choose from all these different choices that were not there a few decades ago. As we mentioned earlier, modern life has become a fascinating scenario compared to what was living like, a few centuries, or even a few decades ago. With all these advancements in human knowledge, and with these tremendous reservoir of human experience, human population has become more diverse than ever; And subsequently with this increasing diversity comes lots and lots of choices to choose from, from a routine choice between types of cereals for breakfast, to choosing a job or a field of study, between all these neverending various choices.
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, that these days we
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choices
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from, has its
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own
proponents.
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different
reasons that
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this this
statement is legitimate and reliable, based on social characteristics of the modern life.

When the subject of study is a society and
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millieu
, that
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people
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live
in, one of the predominant factors that
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comes
into mind, is
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population
and the rate it
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changes
through time. It is not a surprise, that the global
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population
has been increasing since the past two
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millenia
, according to available data. And
subsequently
the more the numbers of
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people
grow, the more diversity emerges and new
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ways
of
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living
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become
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prevalant
. It can
be studied
that with the as these increasing trends of
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growth
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stronger,
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socities
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change
at the same time to be able to
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keep
up with changing demands of their
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poeple
.
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Different
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people
tend to
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choose
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different
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ways
of
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living
,
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different
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,
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norms,
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different
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rules
,
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different
religions, and with all these diversities
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comes
an
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everchanging
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choices
to pick from.

As the increase in the global
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population
was introduced
as one of the most substantial characteristics of the life on earth, the relation and forms of communication between
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people
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has
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changed
dramatically
as well
. As it can be
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seen
, studying humanity in twentieth century, communication between
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people
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has
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changed
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. The more
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people
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get
in touch
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togheter
, the more they
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become
aware of their points of view and their
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different
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ways
of
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living
. Nowadays modern
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man
is immersed
in an omnipresent flux of information; Exposure to these enormous amounts of data, which a huge part of them
is related
to other
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people
and partly their
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different
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choices
and their
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different
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ways
of
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living
, will definitely broaden the options and
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choices
that one might select from; For
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some
, it might
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become
a
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dillema
or an impasse to
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choose
from all these
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different
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choices
that were not there a few decades ago.

As we mentioned earlier, modern life has
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become
a fascinating scenario compared to what was
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living
like, a few centuries, or even a few decades ago. With all these advancements in human knowledge, and with these tremendous reservoir of human experience, human
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population
has
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become
more diverse than ever; And
subsequently
with this increasing diversity
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comes
lots and lots of
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choices
to
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choose
from, from a routine
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choice
between types of cereals for breakfast, to choosing a job or a field of study, between all these
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neverending
various
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choices
.
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IELTS essay More choices for people to choose from

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
420 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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