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the process of making carbonated drinks

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The picture provided explains the process of how fizzy drinks are manufactured. It appears to be a relatively simple linear procedure with five key stages. The process is comprised of the filtering of raw water and addition of carbon dioxide in the early steps, mixing with additional ingredients in the middle, and finally packaging it off to be sold. At the beginning of the process, raw water is cleaned by passing through a filter before the water softener and various chemicals are added. After this stage has been completed. The clean water is then pumped into a heater, which is powered by electricity. Then, it is eventually sent through a cooling pipe to the pivotal stage where carbon dioxide is introduced to create the carbonated effect. From there, the carbonated water is mixed with colouring, syrup and flavours and filtered again prior to bottling and canning. The finished drinks are then boxed up and sent to supermarkets for retail.

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explains
 the process of how fizzy drinks are manufactured
. It appears to be a relatively
 simple linear procedure with five key stages. The process Did you mean "comprises" or "consists of" or "is composed of"?comprisesconsists ofis composed of
is comprised of
 the filtering of raw You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdrinkrain
water
 and addition of carbon dioxide in the early steps, mixing with additional ingredients in the middle, and finally
 packaging it off to be sold
.

At the beginning of the process, raw You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdrinkrain
water
is cleaned
 by passing through a filter This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:previouslyprior to
before
 the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdrinkrain
water
 softener and various chemicals are This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :accrued
added
. “After” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
After
 this stage has been completed
. The clean You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdrinkrain
water
 is then pumped into a heater, which is powered
 by electricity. Then, it is eventually
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sent
 through a cooling pipe to the pivotal stage where carbon dioxide is introduced
 to create the carbonated effect.

From there, the carbonated You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdrinkrain
water
is mixed
 with Possible spelling mistake found.coloringco louring
colouring
, syrup and Possible spelling mistake. 'flavours' is British English.flavors
flavours
 and filtered again prior to bottling and canning. The finished drinks are then boxed up and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :transmitted
sent
 to supermarkets for retail. 