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The private motor vehicle has greatly improved individual freedom and movement. Moreover, the automobile has become a status symbol. Yet the use of private motor vehicles has contributed to some of today most serious problems. How can the use of private m v.2

The private motor vehicle has greatly improved individual freedom and movement. Moreover, the automobile has become a status symbol. Yet the use of private motor vehicles has contributed to some of today most serious problems. How can the use of private m v. 2
Private car is one of the most convenient transportation where people can easily move from place to another in their own way. However it created some grave problems including noise and air pollution, traffic congestion and many more. There are many possible steps we can take to reduce personal vehicle and this essay will state the major action in order to decline private motor vehicle, Firstly, improving the public transportation that would encourage people to use public vehicle instead of private. As we know that people prefer comfortable sit so they seek to private motor however it is far expensive to afford. If there is some changes in public automobile by creating facilities to people then they will avoid private one. As a result there will be no cars on road as well as congestion problem may also be reduced if this action is taken. Secondly, Increasing the price of fuel also helps to decline the private car because people hesitate to pay huge amount on fuel and it will discourage them to drive their own car. Hence, people choose buses or train considering it as a cheapest transportation incompare to cars and the number of private motor will be decline. In additional, government should make strict rules for private vehicles for private vehicles user. For example people who want to buy private vehicle they should have huge amount of money on their bank account and not allowed to have more than one vehicles in each family. Consequently this regulation reduce the purchase of cars, To sum up, if above action implement then the number of using private vehicle will be removed as soon as possible.
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Private
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car
is one of the most convenient transportation where
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people
can
easily
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move
from place to another in their
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own
way.
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However
it created
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some
grave problems including noise and air pollution, traffic congestion and
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many
more. There are
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many
possible steps we can take to
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reduce
personal
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vehicle
and this essay will state the major action in order to decline
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private
motor vehicle,

Firstly
, improving the public transportation that would encourage
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people
to
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use
public
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vehicle
instead
of
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private
. As we know that
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people
prefer comfortable sit
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so
they seek to
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private
motor
however
it is far expensive to afford. If there is
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some
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changes
in public automobile by creating facilities to
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people
then they will avoid
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private
one.
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there will be no
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cars
on road
as well
as congestion problem may
also
be
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reduced
if this action
is taken
.
Secondly
, Increasing the price of fuel
also
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helps
to decline the
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private
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car
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because
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people
hesitate to pay huge amount on fuel and it will discourage them to drive their
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own
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car
.
Hence
,
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people
choose buses or train considering it as
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a
cheapest transportation
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incompare
to
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cars
and the number of
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private
motor will be decline.

In additional,
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government
should
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make
strict
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rules
for
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private
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vehicles
for
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private
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vehicles
user.
For example
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people
who want to
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buy
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private
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vehicle
they should have huge amount of money on their bank account and not
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allowed
to have more than one
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vehicles
in each family.
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Consequently
this regulation
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reduce
the
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purchase
of cars,

To sum up, if above action implement then the number of using
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private
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vehicle
will
be removed
as
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soon
as possible.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay The private motor vehicle has greatly improved individual freedom and movement. Moreover, the automobile has become a status symbol. Yet the use of private motor vehicles has contributed to some of today most serious problems. How can the use of private m v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
276 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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