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Some people think that large, impressive buildings are important for city. Others believe that the money should be spent on improving schools and hospitals. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.2

Some people think that large, impressive buildings are important for city. Others believe that the money should be spent on improving schools and hospitals. v. 2
Every city have their own unique cultural values which represents the city. people have different views some believes that huge tall buildings are more impressive and attract the peoples some may have believes that health and education is important factor which needs more money to spend on it. In my prospective spending more money on education and health is more significant than large buildings. my propensity is for following reasons which are as follows. to begin with, the very first reason i advocate this point that education and health needs more money is with out education and health we cant progress in any field of life, if people of community is more healthy and educated which will more beneficial to whole community, also for other people of the country to attract them to live their because of better health system and educated society, for example we can notice people move to other country because their education and health system. Although some buildings may attract some people but majority of people choose the place to live where their children, s can get quality education and health care. secondly, now a days world economy is going worst, the health care cast is more expensive of ordinary people even wealthy people can, t afford the hospital expenses for some disease like cancer, and also unemployment rate is very high, poor families cant sent their kids to school. Spending money wisely can help the people who cant approach the basic needs of life if people are healthy and educated they will contribute in country or city economy. To sum it up, impressive building can attract few people while spend more money on education and health, will attract more people ti live in city also which contributes in helping the poor people those have basic health and education which helps in country economy as well.
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unique cultural values which represents the city.
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people
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different
views
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some
believes that huge tall
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buildings
are more impressive and
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attract
the
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peoples
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some
may have believes that
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health
and
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education
is
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important
factor which needs more
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money
to spend on it. In my prospective spending more
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money
on
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education
and
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health
is more significant than large
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buildings
.
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my
propensity is for following reasons which are as follows.

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with, the
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first
reason
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i
advocate this point that
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education
and
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health
needs more
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money
is
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with out
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education
and
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health
we
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cant
progress in any field of life, if
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people
of community is more healthy and educated which will more beneficial to whole community,
also
for other
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people
of the
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country
to
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attract
them to
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live
their
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because
of better
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health
system and educated society,
for example
we can notice
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people
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move
to other
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country
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because
their
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education
and
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health
system. Although
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some
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buildings
may
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attract
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some
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people
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majority of
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people
choose the place to
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live
where their children, s can
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get
quality
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education
and
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health
care.

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secondly
,
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now a days
world economy is going worst, the
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health
care cast is more expensive of ordinary
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people
even wealthy
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people
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can, t
afford the hospital expenses for
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some
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disease
like cancer, and
also
unemployment rate is
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very
high, poor families cant
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sent
their kids to school. Spending
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money
wisely
can
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help
the
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people
who
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cant
approach the basic needs of life if
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people
are healthy and educated they will contribute in
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country
or city economy.

To sum it up, impressive
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building
can
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attract
few
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people
while spend more
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money
on
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education
and
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health
, will
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attract
more
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people
ti
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live
in city
also
which contributes in helping the poor
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people
those have basic
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health
and
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education
which
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helps
in
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country
economy
as well
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
50Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think that large, impressive buildings are important for city. Others believe that the money should be spent on improving schools and hospitals. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
310 words
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