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The price of the fast food should be increased people getting fatty nowadays . Do you agree or disagree

The price of the fast food should be increased people getting fatty nowadays. PkLOX
Food plays an crucial role in everyones life as without food people cannot survive in their life. A few people argue that the price of junk food ought to be escalated because individuals become overweight. I consent with this notion since consuming fast food has catastrophic impact on human's health. There are myriad of causes of burgeoning cost of spicy food. The first and the foremost is that, if individuals eat ready made food, it would not be fruitful for their health. This is because, cardiac disease and obesity are the typical examples of health issues that can be faced by people who consume food with high content of sugar and fat. For instance majority of Youngsters love to eat convenience food due to which they gain more weight along with facing numerous difficulties in their life on account of having fatty body such as they do not either able to emphasise on their work or study as well as unable to do walk quickly. Apart from this, when price of street food is increasing then it will be worthwhile to mitigate the obstacle of obesity. This is because people start to buy less fast food and do not outlay money more on these kinds of things. This is owing to the fact that, they can save money, which they can utilise on their important tasks and can make their better life. In conclusion, aforementioned reasons are the consequences of escalating price of junk food as individuals face obese hurdle and proliferating price is the expedient way to curb this issue, which cannot be brushed aside by human beings.
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everyones
life as without
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food
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people
cannot survive in their life. A few
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people
argue that the
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price
of junk
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food
ought to
be escalated
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because
individuals become overweight. I consent with this notion since consuming
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fast
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food
has catastrophic impact on human's health.

There are myriad of causes of burgeoning cost of spicy
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food
. The
first
and the foremost
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is
that, if individuals eat
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ready made
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food
, it would not be fruitful for their health. This is
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because
, cardiac disease and obesity are the typical examples of health issues that can
be faced
by
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people
who consume
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food
with high content of sugar and
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fat
.
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majority of Youngsters
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love
to eat convenience
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food
due to which they gain more weight along with facing numerous difficulties in their life on account of having fatty body such as they do not either able to
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emphasise
on their work or study
as well
as unable to do walk
quickly
.

Apart from this, when
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price
of street
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food
is increasing then it will be worthwhile to mitigate the obstacle of obesity. This is
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because
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people
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start
to
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buy
less
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fast
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and do not outlay money more on these kinds of things. This is owing to the fact that, they can save money, which they can
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utilise
on their
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important
tasks and can
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make
their better life.

In conclusion
, aforementioned reasons are the consequences of escalating
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price
of junk
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food
as individuals face obese hurdle and proliferating
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price
is the expedient way to curb this issue, which cannot
be brushed
aside by human beings.
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IELTS essay The price of the fast food should be increased people getting fatty nowadays.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
269 words
6.0
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