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some people argue that teaching of healthy eating habits should be responsibility of teachers

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It is argued that teachers are best tutors in educating school children about healthy eating habits. This essay opposes the view point that it is the teacher's responsibility to teach children healthy eating habits. It will discuss why teachers cannot be given responsibility of the child's health eating plan, before highlighting why some may support this view. To begin with, children spent most their time in school in a constructive way, a teacher can employ interesting ways to teach children such as, visual pictures and vivid pictures which make long lasting effect on the learner's brain. However, this point is flawed in that teacher responsibility comes at a later stage of the child's life, when the child is already introduced to balanced meals by their parents. For example, in school in their early grades, infants are taught the difference between body building foods and junk food. On the other hand, healthy eating begin from the birth, when a baby is to survive on breast-milk only for the first six months. Breastfeeding is essential for babies as this provides them with vitamins, proteins and fat so that the baby grows healthy and strong. At the time, when the baby is school ready they would have been trained to have the healthy eating habits already, in school they will further the knowledge of eating healthy. For instance, in school they learn about the nutritional benefits of having a seven color balanced meal which includes vitamins, protein, fats and carbohydrates. To conclude, it can be noted that the first teacher is the parent and teacher responsibility comes when the child is enrolled in school
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is argued
that
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teachers
are best tutors in educating
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school
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children
about
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healthy
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eating
habits. This essay opposes the view point that it is the teacher's
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responsibility
to teach
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children
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healthy
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eating
habits. It will discuss why
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teachers
cannot be
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given
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responsibility
of the child's health
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eating
plan,
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before
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some
may support this view.

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begin
with,
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children
spent most their time in
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school
Consider replacing "in a constructive way" with the adverb for "constructive"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a constructive way
, a
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teacher
can employ interesting ways to teach
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children
such as, visual pictures and vivid pictures which
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make
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long lasting
effect on the learner's brain.
However
, this point
is flawed
in that
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teacher
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responsibility
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comes
at a later stage of the child's life, when the child is already introduced to balanced meals by their parents.
For example
, in
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school
in their early grades, infants
are taught
the difference between body building foods and junk food.

On the other hand
,
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healthy
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eating
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begin
from the birth, when a baby is to survive on breast-milk
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only
for the
first
six months. Breastfeeding is essential for
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babies
as this provides them with vitamins, proteins and
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fat
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so
that the baby grows
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healthy
and strong. At the time, when the baby is
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school
ready they would have
been trained
to have the
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healthy
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eating
habits already, in
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school
they will
further
the knowledge of
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eating
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healthy
.
For instance
, in
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school
they learn about the nutritional benefits of having a seven color balanced meal which includes vitamins, protein, fats and carbohydrates.

To conclude
, it can
be noted
that the
first
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teacher
is the parent and
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teacher
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responsibility
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comes
when the child
is enrolled
in
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school
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IELTS essay some people argue that teaching of healthy eating habits should be responsibility of teachers

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
270 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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