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The prevention of health problems and illness is more important than treatment and medicine. Government funding should reflect this. To what extent do you agree?

Prevention is better than cure, as it is rightly said taking care of one’s health is of paramount importance rather than treating the aftermath. This essay will explain why health is the extremely important factor of an individual’s life and how government can facilitate the awareness of prevention of illnesses rather than curing it. With the fast paced life that the world lives in currently, many often forget taking care of their own health and thus fall prey to an array of diseases only to rely on medicines and treatments later. Illnesses also comes with a cost that many cannot afford and hence end up losing their lives. For example, widespread of polio in late 1990’s affected large percentage of children, reports stated that more than half of the affected victims of polio were children from the slum areas. The Government should carry out awareness projects mainly focusing on the under priviledged areas of the country and also start campaigns free of cost for saving lives of the citizens. Not only the needy can be saved from the ramifications of uncalled and unknown diseases but they can also prevent it before falling prey to any diseases. For example, UK had carried out the biggest polio vaccination drive in 1980s which made all the countries aware and saved a life of millions before falling victim to the illness. Therefore, I completely agree that government bodies must take adequate measures before the onset of any unforeseen circumstances and set up local hospitals which cater to the needy who are not educated and are the primary victims to epidemic diseases.
Prevention is better than cure, as it is
rightly
said taking care of one’s health is of paramount importance
rather
than treating the aftermath. This essay will
explain
why health is the
extremely
important
factor of an individual’s life and how
government
can facilitate the awareness of prevention of illnesses
rather
than curing it.

With the
fast
paced life that the world
lives
in
currently
,
many
often
forget taking care of their
own
health and
thus
fall prey to an array of
diseases
only
to rely on medicines and treatments later. Illnesses
also
comes
with a cost that
many
cannot afford and
hence
end
up losing their
lives
.
For example
, widespread of polio in late
1990’s
affected
large percentage of children, reports stated that more than half of the
affected
victims of polio were children from the slum areas.

The
Government
should carry out awareness projects
mainly
focusing on the under
priviledged
areas of the country and
also
start
campaigns free of cost for saving
lives
of the citizens. Not
only
the needy can
be saved
from the ramifications of uncalled and unknown
diseases
but
they can
also
prevent
it
before
falling prey to any
diseases
.
For example
, UK had carried out the biggest polio vaccination drive
in 1980s
which made all the countries aware and saved a life of millions
before
falling victim to the illness.

Therefore
, I completely
agree
that
government
bodies
must
take adequate measures
before
the onset of any unforeseen circumstances and set up local hospitals which cater to the needy who are not educated and are the primary victims to epidemic
diseases
.
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IELTS essay The prevention of health problems and illness is more important than treatment and medicine. Government funding should reflect this.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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