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Road accidents are rising at an exponential pace.

Road accidents are rising at an exponential pace. It is generally suggested by some masses that in order to make commuters safe on the road; the age to provide car driving license has to be more. I vehemently accord with this notion; however, also believe that some other measures have to be taken along with. Indubitably, early authorization of driving cars is a predominant cause of unsafe roads. A number of cars run on roads which attributes to not only traffic congestion, but also fatal accidents as teenagers get license easily. For example, after completing eighteen years; they become eligible to drive in India. This age is full of zeal and zest. They violate traffic rules, though they are much aware about such rules to be followed. Therefore, increasing the age limit to have permission to drive cars are more likely to be a positive step in this regard. Some feasible steps; however, need to be taken as well. Firstly, rigorous traffic rules have to be made. People usually escape from punishment, owing to corrupted practices of traffic police. Thereby, that person must be strictly punished who resist traffic norms. Secondly, the condition of roads should be ameliorated because these become the main contributing factor of misshapen. These should be wide and properly managed regularly. Lastly, the children should be made aware about the rules of roads to avert catastrophic consequences, if they do not abide by such norms. To conclude, although the limiting age of issuing license can be an effective way, it is not sufficient. Bureaucrats have to take certain other related corrective measures.
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suggested by
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masses that in order to
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commuters safe on the
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; the
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age
to provide
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car
driving license
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has to
be more. I
vehemently
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also
believe that
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some
other measures
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have to
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cars
is a predominant cause of unsafe
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. A number of
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cars
run on
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roads
which attributes to not
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only
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congestion,
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also
fatal accidents as
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teenagers
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license
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For example
, after completing eighteen years; they become eligible to drive in India. This
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age
is full of zeal and zest. They violate
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traffic
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rules
, though they are much aware about such
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to
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.
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, increasing the
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limit to have permission to drive
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cars
are more likely to be a
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positive
step in this regard.

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Some
feasible steps;
however
, need to
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as well
.
Firstly
, rigorous
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traffic
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rules
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have to
be made
.
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usually
escape from punishment, owing to corrupted practices of
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traffic
police. Thereby, that person
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must
be
strictly
punished who resist
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traffic
norms.
Secondly
, the condition of
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roads
should
be ameliorated
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because
these become the main contributing factor of misshapen. These should be wide and
properly
managed
regularly
.
Lastly
, the children should
be made
aware about the
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rules
of
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roads
to avert catastrophic consequences, if they do not abide by such norms.

To conclude
, although the limiting
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age
of issuing license can be an effective way, it is not sufficient. Bureaucrats
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have to
take certain other related corrective measures.
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IELTS essay Road accidents are rising at an exponential pace.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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