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The prevention of health problems and illness is more important than treatment and medicine. Government should reflect this. To what extent do you agree v.8

The prevention of health problems and illness is more important than treatment and medicine. Government should reflect this. 8
Prevention is better than cure. We all know the famous phrase from our childhood, but hardly anyone of us abides by it. In the era of growing industrialization and technology, health problems are one of the most common issues to deal with. However, according to my opinion authority should reflect on preventing the health, illness rather than its cure. In the following essay I will shed some light in favour of the above issue. To begin with, curing any infection demands a lot of financial support which means if in any case the infection or disease spreads in one part of society, within a limited time period, it spreads everywhere resulting in a lot of expenditure on medication and maintenance of a healthy environment. If ministry educates people regarding any infection in advance, a lot of money can be saved. Moreover, we should understand the fact that progress of a nation depends on the efficiency and strength of its people so its better to create awareness within the society regarding any current fitness problem which will save the person from deteriorating its well-being even after the availability of proper medication. Lets take an example of seasonal diseases in India like Dengue, Malaria, Typhoid during rainy season where ministry educates the population via various forms of media to avoid doing activities which aggravate these diseases. Furthermore, if the ministry will educate his people regarding any fitness issues resulting in a healthy lifestyle in other challenging fields and there will be more positive energy for developing a powerful country. To conclude, in my opinion any country who wants to attain healthy environment in todays fast paced life, educating its countrymen regarding the various infections and ailments is necessary. Hence awareness by the government will not only bring happiness into the environment, but the prosperity of the nation.
Prevention is better than cure. We all know the
famous
phrase from our childhood,
but
hardly anyone of us abides by it. In the era of growing industrialization and technology, health problems are one of the most common issues to deal with.
However
, according to my opinion authority should reflect on preventing the health, illness
rather
than its cure. In the following essay I will shed
some
light in
favour
of the above issue.

To
begin
with, curing any
infection
demands
a lot of
financial support which means if in any case the
infection
or disease spreads in one part of society, within a limited time period, it spreads everywhere resulting in
a lot of
expenditure on medication and maintenance of a healthy environment. If ministry educates
people
regarding any
infection
in advance,
a lot of
money can
be saved
.

Moreover
, we should understand the fact that progress of a nation depends on the efficiency and strength of its
people
so
its better to create awareness within the society regarding any
current
fitness problem which will save the person from deteriorating its well-being even after the availability of proper medication.
Lets
take an example of seasonal diseases in India like Dengue, Malaria, Typhoid during rainy season where ministry educates the population via various forms of media to avoid doing activities which aggravate these diseases.

Furthermore
, if the ministry will educate his
people
regarding any fitness issues resulting in a healthy lifestyle in other challenging fields and there will be more
positive
energy for developing a powerful country.

To conclude
, in my opinion any country who wants to attain healthy environment in
todays
fast
paced life, educating its countrymen regarding the various
infections
and ailments is necessary.
Hence
awareness by the
government
will not
only
bring happiness into the environment,
but
the prosperity of the nation.
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IELTS essay The prevention of health problems and illness is more important than treatment and medicine. Government should reflect this. 8

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
305 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Grammatical Range: 7.0
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