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The presented illustration outlines the proportion of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country throughout the years between 1987 and 2007

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The presented illustration outlines the proportion of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country throughout the years between 1987 and 2007 As is observed, the figures for a tourist visit to the coast, mountains, and lakes all three which were trended in both increased in the 20 years. In addition, the lakes have a number of visitors who had a dramatic change. It is conspicuous that the number of foreign travelers who were attracted to the coast, mountains, and lakes. Tourist numbers in coastal and mountainous areas rose over the period. The number of travelers who visit the coast in the first 5 years decreased slightly to 35 thousand people and next 15 years improved considerably 75 thousand. Besides that, tourist members in the mountains jumped gradually to 35 thousand people. On the other hand, the number of those who chose the lakes as a travel destination has jumpy change. During 1987-1997, the overseas visitors who paid a visit to the lakes quick a leap to 30 thousand and next 10 years continued climbing 72 thousand and down back fell sharply 50 thousand and are predicted to go down in the near future.
The presented illustration outlines the proportion of overseas visitors to three
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areas in a European country throughout the years between 1987 and 2007

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is observed
, the figures for a tourist visit to the coast, mountains, and
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lakes
all three which
were trended
in both increased in the 20 years.
In addition
, the
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lakes
have a
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number
of visitors
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who
had a dramatic
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change
.

It is conspicuous that the
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number
of foreign travelers
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who
were attracted
to the coast, mountains, and
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lakes
. Tourist
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numbers
in coastal and mountainous areas rose over the period. The
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number
of travelers
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who
visit the coast in the
first
5 years decreased
slightly
to 35 thousand
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people
and
next
15 years
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improved
considerably
75 thousand.
Besides
that, tourist members in the mountains jumped
gradually
to 35 thousand
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people
.
On the other hand
, the
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number
of those
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who
chose the
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lakes
as a travel destination has jumpy
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change
. During 1987-1997, the overseas visitors
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who
paid a visit to the
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lakes
quick a leap to 30 thousand and
next
10 years continued climbing 72 thousand and down back fell
sharply
50 thousand and
are predicted
to go down in the near future.
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IELTS essay The presented illustration outlines the proportion of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country throughout the years between 1987 and 2007

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