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Roads should be replaced bu railroads .write to both sides

Roads should be replaced bu railroads. write to both sides 5kD8D
Every government works hard so that citizens can commute safely and quickly while businesses get a solid transportation system for trade facilities. Thus when the question arises whether a government should focus on improving its railways or roads, people have divided opinions. I personally agree that the government should spend more money on the railway system. Fast of all, railways offer a safer commuting experience both for the citizens and traders. The numbers of road accidents and highway casualties in many countries, for example, are far higher than that of railway accidents. Thus investing in a safer mode of transportation is a much more prudent idea. Moreover, rails cause comparatively less environmental pollutions while road vehicles are the main reason for increasing pollution and around the world. Second, rails can carry hundreds of people and several hundred tonnes of goods at a time while road transports not built for that. Some shuttle trains are many times faster than that those of private cars and public buses. Thus improved railways would save peoples’ valuable time every day. Thirdly, rail lines are usually away from the main cities and that is why some busy cities have no other alternatives than to improve their rail transportation system. Express trains can reduce the traffic congestion in metro areas, and more investment to improve the railway is the only possible solution in many cities where population density is high. Finally, the population of the world is increasing rapidly, and that is why investing more money in a faster and reliable transportation system is more logical than investing in the older transportation system. Railways will be the future in the transportation sector, and investment in it is the better choice for any government. In conclusion, I believe that a government, either in a developed or a developing country, should invest to build a safer, faster and more reliable transportation system, and the railway, for this reason, should get an obvious priority.
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works
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so
that citizens can commute
safely
and
quickly
while businesses
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get
a solid
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transportation
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system
for trade facilities.
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Thus
when the question arises whether a
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government
should focus on improving its
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railways
or
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roads
,
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people
have divided opinions. I
personally
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agree
that the
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government
should spend more money on the
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railway
system.

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Fast
of all,
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railways
offer a safer commuting experience both for the citizens and traders. The numbers of
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road
accidents and highway casualties in
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many
countries,
for example
, are far higher than that of
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railway
accidents.
Thus
investing in a safer mode of
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transportation
is a much more prudent
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idea
.
Moreover
, rails cause
comparatively
less environmental pollutions while
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road
vehicles are the main reason for increasing pollution and around the world.

Second, rails can carry hundreds of
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people
and several hundred tonnes of
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goods
at a time while
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road
transports not built for that.
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Some
shuttle trains are
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many
times faster than that those of private cars and public buses.
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improved
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railways
would save peoples’ valuable time every day.
Thirdly
,
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rail
lines are
usually
away from the main cities and
that is
why
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some
busy cities have no other alternatives than to
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improve
their
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rail
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transportation
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system
. Express trains can
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reduce
the traffic congestion in metro areas, and more investment to
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improve
the
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railway
is the
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only
possible solution in
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many
cities where population density is high.

Finally
, the population of the world is increasing
rapidly
, and
that is
why investing more money in a faster and reliable
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transportation
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system
is more logical than investing in the older
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transportation
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system
.
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Railways
will be the future in the
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transportation
sector, and investment in it is the better choice for any
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government
.

In conclusion
, I believe that a
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government
, either in a developed or a
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developing country
, should invest to build a safer, faster and more reliable
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transportation
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system
, and the
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railway
,
for this reason
, should
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get
an obvious priority.
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IELTS essay Roads should be replaced bu railroads. write to both sides

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  American English
5 paragraphs
325 words
6.5
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