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"The poor communities have been recently distressed, donation is the key solution to help people in those of poor communities." Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of the statement and and Indicate your opinion and reason to support your idea.

"The poor communities have been recently distressed, donation is the key solution to help people in those of poor communities. " Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of the statement and and Indicate your opinion and reason to support your idea. 6m1Qx
Poverty, which is caused by unemployment or low salary, are widely concern over the world. Effect of poverty makes poor life quality, so donation is key solution to solve this problem. It is true that donation is important to support people who are lack of income. Even though this trend can be beneficial because the poor get thoroughly helping, the main disadvantage is that people not learn to develop themselves which cannot be overlooked. The following example will be provided in order to support my point of views. One of the most important reasons why this is positive development is that donation is direct helping to people who are poverty, thus people are helped on time. In addition, basic element such as food and medication are rapidly accessed. Therefore, government or related organization plays a major role in offering to people which can be seen as an advantage. However, its benefits come with consequences. This development is thought to be disadvantages is that because donation is temporary way to help the poor so, government or related organization should support learning for working more than donating. Because if the poor have knowledge, they will get away from poverty. Besides no one can help the poor overtime, and offering for a long time may lead them to lazy which can be considered a drawback. In conclusion, although this trend is beneficial because people can access to direct and rapid helping. It can be detrimental as people may look forward to waiting donation, but they not attempt to earn money by themselves.
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widely
concern over the world. Effect of
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life quality,
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donation
is key solution to solve this problem. It is true that
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donation
is
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important
to support
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people
who are lack of income.
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this trend can be beneficial
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because
the
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poor
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get
thoroughly
helping, the main disadvantage is that
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people
not learn to develop themselves which cannot
be overlooked
. The following example will
be provided
in order to support my point of views.

One of the most
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important
reasons why this is
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positive
development is that
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donation
is direct helping to
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people
who are
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poverty
,
thus
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people
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helped
on time.
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, basic element such as food and medication are
rapidly
accessed.
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government
or related organization plays a major role in offering to
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people
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,
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government
or related organization should support learning for working more than donating.
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if the
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poor
have knowledge, they will
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get
away from
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poverty
.
Besides
no one can
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help
the
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poor
overtime, and offering for a long time may lead them to lazy which can
be considered
a drawback.

In conclusion
, although this trend is beneficial
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people
can access to direct and rapid helping. It can be detrimental as
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people
may look forward to waiting
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donation
,
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they not attempt to earn money by themselves.
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IELTS essay "The poor communities have been recently distressed, donation is the key solution to help people in those of poor communities. " Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of the statement and and Indicate your opinion and reason to support your idea.

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