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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? “Grades (marks) encourage students to learn”. Write an essay (about 150 to 200 words) to express your personal point of view.

“Grades (marks) encourage students to learn”. Write an essay (about 150 to 200 words) to express your personal point of view. w7LYl
In this day and age, many people support the view that grades help motivate students to learn. From my own perspective, there is no denying that grades are of great importance to students, but they can still be disadvantageous at times. On the one hand, there is no doubt that grades play an important role in students’ learning life. Firstly, grades are standard measurements for students’ ability to learn and show their progress in class. By looking at the students’ grades, teachers can already tell which level their students are on, how much knowledge they have acquired, along with their strengths and weaknesses. Consequently, the teachers will be able to find the appropriate teaching method for the students, which may help reinforce or even widen the students’ knowledge. Secondly, grades make studying competitive and encourage students to learn better. Since students can compare their grades with other students, they are able to know everyone’s ability to gain and master the knowledge. Hence, some may set an aim for themselves and put their shoulders to the wheel with a view to surpassing their classmates. On the other hand, grades can also be detrimental to students. First of all, grades may make students feel timid or unconfident in class. Many objective factors can lead to students being unable to give their best during the exams and receiving bad grades, such as sickness, tiredness, not being interested in that certain subject, to name but a few. Bad grades may result in shyness, lack of confidence, or even stress and breakdown due to being put under so much pressure by teachers and parents. Ironically, this would discourage students from learning rather than encourage them to learn. Second of all, students who get good grades may become conceited and arrogant. Those may rest on their laurels and as a result, their grades will eventually go downhill. In summary, it goes without saying that grades are extremely crucial to students. Sadly enough, grades can also be a double-edged sword that can negatively affect students’ mental health.
In this day and age,
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support the view that
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grades
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help
motivate
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students
to
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learn
. From my
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own
perspective, there is no denying that
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grades
are of great importance to
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students
,
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but
they can
still
be disadvantageous at times.

On the one hand, there is no doubt that
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grades
play an
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important
role in
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students’
learning life.
Firstly
,
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grades
are standard measurements for
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students’
ability to
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learn
and
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show
their progress in
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class
. By looking at the
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students’
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grades
, teachers can already
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tell
which level their
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students
are on, how much knowledge they have acquired, along with their strengths and weaknesses.
Consequently
, the teachers will be able to find the appropriate teaching method for the
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students
, which may
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help
reinforce or even widen the
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students’
knowledge.
Secondly
,
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grades
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make
studying competitive and encourage
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students
to
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learn
better. Since
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students
can compare their
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grades
with other
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students
, they are able to know everyone’s ability to gain and master the knowledge.
Hence
,
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some
may set an aim for themselves and put their shoulders to the wheel with a view to surpassing their classmates.

On the other hand
,
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grades
can
also
be detrimental to
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students
.
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First of all
,
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grades
may
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make
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students
feel timid or unconfident in
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class
.
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Many
objective factors can lead to
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students
being unable to give their best during the exams and receiving
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bad
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grades
, such as sickness, tiredness, not
being interested
in that certain subject, to name
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but
a few.
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Bad
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grades
may result in shyness, lack of confidence, or even
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stress
and breakdown due to
being put
under
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so
much pressure by teachers and parents.
Ironically
, this would discourage
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students
from learning
rather
than encourage them to
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learn
. Second of all,
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students
who
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get
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good
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grades
may become conceited and arrogant. Those may rest on their laurels and
as a result
, their
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grades
will
eventually
go downhill.

In summary, it goes without saying that
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grades
are
extremely
crucial to
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students
.
Sadly
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enough
,
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grades
can
also
be a double-edged sword that can
negatively
affect
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students’
mental health.
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IELTS essay “Grades (marks) encourage students to learn”. Write an essay (about 150 to 200 words) to express your personal point of view.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
340 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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