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The place you want explore

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There are many people who say that exploring places like mountains or oceans is very dangerous and should not be tried, but I don't really think so. I know there is a place that can both bring a sense of security and give us great experiences, which is Fansipan peak - a place that I also want to try to conquer in the near future. The first thing fansipan is considered as the roof of Indochina is the highest mountain in Vietnam and it is not difficult to climb to the top. For example, Everest is also a high mountain, but with rugged terrain that is difficult to conquer, Fansipan is lower and the terrain is easy to go for adventurers. The second is the view from the foot of the mountain and the top of Fansipan is very beautiful not inferior to any mountain peak. For example, at the foot of the mountain, there are many large old trees with a bright green color, reaching the top of the mountain we will be able to catch the sunrise or sunset mixed with the fog, the scene is really beautiful. The last thing that I think we should explore Fansipan peak is that this will be a trip that makes us learn new skills and discover ourselves. For example, we can learn skills such as camping, dealing with difficult situations, above all, have time to let go of our daily worries, surpass our limits and discover new talents. Xem thêm về văn bản nguồn nàyNhập văn bản nguồn để có thông tin dịch thuật bổ sung Gửi phản hồi Bảng điều khiển bên
There are
many
people
who say that exploring places like
mountains
or oceans is
very
dangerous
and should not
be tried
,
but
I don't
really
think
so
. I know there is a place that can both bring a sense of security and give us great experiences, which is
Fansipan
peak
-
a place that I
also
want to try to conquer in the near future. The
first
thing
fansipan
is considered
as the roof of Indochina is the highest
mountain
in Vietnam and it is not difficult to climb to the top.
For example
, Everest is
also
a high
mountain
,
but
with rugged terrain
that is
difficult to conquer,
Fansipan
is lower and the terrain is easy to go for adventurers. The second is the view from the foot of the
mountain
and the top of
Fansipan
is
very
beautiful
not inferior to any
mountain
peak.
For example
, at the foot of the
mountain
, there are
many
large
old
trees with a bright green color, reaching the top of the
mountain
we will be able to catch the sunrise or sunset mixed with the fog, the scene is
really
beautiful
. The last thing that I
think
we should explore
Fansipan
peak is that this will be a trip that
makes
us learn new
skills
and discover ourselves.
For example
, we can learn
skills
such as camping, dealing with difficult situations,
above all
, have time to
let
go of our daily worries, surpass our limits and discover new talents.

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dịch
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bổ
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IELTS essay The place you want explore

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
272 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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