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The pie graphs below compare the percentages of carbohydrates, protein, and fat in three different types of diet. v.2

The pie graphs below compare the percentages of carbohydrates, protein, and fat in three different types of diet. v. 2
The pie graphs below compare the percentages of carbohydrates, protein, and fat in three different types of diet. Overall, it is clear that the healthier diet the more they contain proportions of carbohydrates and the less the fat rates inside them. The average diet meal has the most protein’s rate and the least carbohydrates’ percentage. The number of carbohydrates accounted for 40% in average meals. While this figure stays the same proportions of the fat and protein combine in the healthy diet, the rate of carbohydrates occupied two-thirds in the healthy diet for sportspeople. The number of protein, in the average diet, accounted for the same figure of carbohydrates and double the rate of fat (20%). While protein’s percentage, in the healthy diet, lower 10% than this rate in the average diet, the fat’s proportion stay the same number. In the healthy diet for athletic, both protein and fat’s rate, which are 25% and 15% respectively, are cut back 5% compare with these figures in the healthy diet.
The pie graphs below compare the percentages of
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carbohydrates
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fat
in three
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types of diet.

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clear
that the healthier diet the more they contain proportions of
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carbohydrates
and the less the
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fat
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rates
inside them. The
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average
diet meal has the most protein’s
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rate
and the least
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carbohydrates’
percentage.

The number of
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carbohydrates
accounted for 40% in
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average
meals. While this figure stays the same proportions of the
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fat
and protein combine in the
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healthy
diet, the
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rate
of
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carbohydrates
occupied two-thirds in the
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healthy
diet for sportspeople.

The number of protein, in the
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average
diet, accounted for the same figure of
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carbohydrates
and double the
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rate
of
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fat
(20%). While protein’s percentage, in the
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healthy
diet, lower 10% than this
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rate
in the
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average
diet, the
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fat’s
proportion stay the same number. In the
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healthy
diet for athletic, both protein and
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fat’s
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rate
, which are 25% and 15%
respectively
, are
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cut
back 5% compare with these figures in the
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healthy
diet.
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IELTS essay The pie graphs below compare the percentages of carbohydrates, protein, and fat in three different types of diet. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
168 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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