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The pie chart below shows the main reason why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how there causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and mak v.2

The pie chart below shows the main reason why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how there causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.
The above- mentioned pie-chart represents the most determined causes of degradation of agricultural land throughout the world and the possible, three regions impacted by it in the whole period of 1990' s. I will evaluated the given whole data in the upcoming paragraphs. Firstly, over-grazing and deforestation were the main concernable causes that had 35% and 30% share in total percentage of the whole causes. Beside it, over-cultivation was 28% and other causes left with 7% participation in it. Secondly, europe faced total 23% degraded land over oceania and north-america, that, had 13% and 5% degraded land area. In oceania, overgrazing had 11. 3% share in total degraded proportion and europe and north-america share 9. 8% of deforestation and 3. 3% of over-cultivation in the whole degraded area. In the conclusion, it seems to me that over-grazing played an important role in land degradation and it impacted badly to oceania, while, europe had a large degraded area on over other regions.
The above- mentioned pie-chart represents the most determined
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of degradation of agricultural
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land
throughout the world and the possible, three regions impacted by it in the
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whole
period of 1990' s. I will
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data in the upcoming paragraphs.

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that had 35% and 30% share in total percentage of the
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whole
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. Beside it, over-cultivation was 28% and other
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with 7% participation in it.

Secondly
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faced total 23% degraded
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over
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oceania
and
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north-america
, that, had 13% and 5% degraded
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area. In
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oceania
, overgrazing had 11. 3% share in total degraded proportion and
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europe
and
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north-america
share 9. 8% of deforestation and 3. 3% of over-cultivation in the
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degraded area.

In the conclusion, it seems to me that over-grazing played an
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role in
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degradation and it impacted
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oceania
, while,
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europe
had a large degraded area on over other regions.
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IELTS essay The pie chart below shows the main reason why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how there causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.

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4 paragraphs
161 words
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