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Subjects at schools are selected by authorities such as the central government (not by the teachers). Some say that these subjects should be chosen by teachers. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.2

Subjects at schools are selected by authorities such as the central government (not by the teachers). Some say that these subjects should be chosen by teachers. v. 2
In most countries, what is taught in schools is the responsibility of the central government. However, some people believe that teachers should decide the curriculum at schools. I completely disagree with this proposition. To begin with, the knowledge and skills given by subjects at schools need to be useful for the society and the development of their own country. Thus, the authorities, with essential power and resources, must be responsible for designing the suitable syllabus. In particular, the balancing of time and content between subjects, require not only a substantial knowledge but also practical experiences from pedagogical experts in the educational organization, which is not an easy task that a normal teacher can handle. The roles of teachers should only be limited to transferring good knowledge to learners. On the other hand, to establish a standardization in educational system, not only the courses but also other systems such as ranking systems and examinations need also be coordinated by the authorities. For example, every high school students in Vietnam, who expect to move to higher education have to attend the university entrance examination. In addition, it is also required that the teaching facilities have to be updated concurrently with the development of the country. As a result, more and more schools are translating into practice the use of technology in the teaching sessions. In conclusion, designing syllabus as well as building a standardization in educational system is not a teacher’s duties. Therefore, I personally believe that the authorities who have enough power should be responsible for this jobs instead of normal teachers.
In most countries, what
is taught
in
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schools
is the responsibility of the central
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government
.
However
,
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some
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people
believe that
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teachers
should decide the curriculum at
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schools
. I completely disagree with this proposition.

To
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begin
with, the knowledge and
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skills
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given
by subjects at
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schools
need to be useful for the society and the development of their
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own
country.
Thus
, the authorities, with essential power and resources,
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must
be responsible for designing the suitable syllabus.
In particular
, the balancing of time and content between subjects, require not
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only
a substantial knowledge
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but
also
practical experiences from pedagogical experts in the educational organization, which is not an easy task that a normal
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teacher
can handle. The roles of
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teachers
should
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only
be limited
to transferring
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good
knowledge to learners.

On the other hand
, to establish a standardization in educational
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system
, not
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only
the courses
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but
also
other
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systems
such as ranking
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systems
and examinations need
also
be coordinated
by the authorities.
For example
, every high
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school
students in Vietnam, who
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expect
to
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move
to higher education
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have to
attend the university entrance examination.
In addition
, it is
also
required that the teaching facilities
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have to
be updated
concurrently
with the development of the country.
As a result
, more and more
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schools
are translating into practice the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of technology in the teaching sessions.

In conclusion
, designing syllabus
as well
as building a standardization in educational
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system
is not a
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teacher’s
duties.
Therefore
, I
personally
believe that the authorities who have
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enough
power should be responsible for
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this
jobs
instead
of normal
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teachers
.
19Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay Subjects at schools are selected by authorities such as the central government (not by the teachers). Some say that these subjects should be chosen by teachers. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
261 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
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