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The pictures demonstrate how to transfer the sugar cane into sugar in many steps.

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The pictures demonstrate how to transfer the sugar cane into sugar in many steps. Overall, there are 7 steps in this manufacture process. Especially, in the beginning of this is growing the sugar cane about 12-18 months, it depends on the weather and care. Then, the famer will do the harvesting for export in next sessions and the last step is to drying and cooling the sugar. Firstly, after growing and harvesting by humans and tractors. All of the sugar canes will be crushed by the machine for contain juice. In sugar canes have limestone so in the fourth step is to purifying juice by the limestone filter. Next, Evaporating juice by heat for produce syrup. Then, sent it to the sixth step called “Centrifuge”, to separates sugar crystals from the syrup by spin around. Finally, the last step is drying and cooling sugar and finished. After finish all the processes, ready for export.
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, there are 7
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in this manufacture process.
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, in the beginning of this is growing the
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sugar
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cane
about 12-18 months, it depends on the weather and care. Then, the
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famer
will do the harvesting for export in
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to drying
and cooling the sugar.

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sugar
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canes
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by the machine for contain juice. In
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sugar
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canes
have limestone
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so
in the fourth
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step
is
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juice by the limestone filter.

Next
, Evaporating juice by heat for produce syrup. Then,
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sent
it to the sixth
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step
called “Centrifuge”, to separates
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sugar
crystals from the syrup by spin around.
Finally
, the last
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step
is drying and cooling
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sugar
and finished. After finish all the processes, ready for export.
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IELTS essay The pictures demonstrate how to transfer the sugar cane into sugar in many steps.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
154 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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