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The pictures compare the layout in 2009 with the layout in 2014 of the waterfront areas of a town called Darwin.

The pictures compare the layout in 2009 with the layout in 2014 of the waterfront areas of a town called Darwin. drpk7
The pictures compare the layout in 2009 with the layout in 2014 of the waterfront areas of a town called Darwin. It is obvious that there were a number of changes to the layout in 2014, mainly in the industrial area. No changes were made to the school and convention center. As can be seen from the pictures, in 2009, the industrial area had large grassland and 3 residential building. Until in 2014, instead of grass, this place was plant tresses, had footpath in the center and constructed 3 more residential building. The university building also added in the industrial area in the layout in 2014. Look at the pictures in more details, the swimming pool in the layout in 2009 was remained and added one in the north west, one in the industrial area near the lake in 2014. On the sea, the harbor was built up and the fishing area was maintained over 5 years. The school area, convention center area and lake area were also conserved in layout in 2014
The pictures compare the
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in 2009 with the
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in 2014 of the waterfront
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areas
of a town called Darwin.

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in 2014,
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in the
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industrial
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. No
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changes
were made
to the school and convention center.

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from the pictures, in 2009, the
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industrial
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had large grassland and 3 residential building. Until in 2014,
instead
of grass, this place was plant tresses, had footpath in the center and constructed 3 more residential building. The university building
also
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added
in the
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industrial
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area
in the
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in 2014.

Look at the pictures in more
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, the swimming pool in the
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layout
in 2009
was remained
and
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added
one in the
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north west
, one in the
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industrial
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near the lake in 2014. On the sea, the harbor
was built
up and the fishing
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area
was maintained
over 5 years. The school
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, convention center
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area
and lake
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were
also
conserved in
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layout
in 2014
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IELTS essay The pictures compare the layout in 2009 with the layout in 2014 of the waterfront areas of a town called Darwin.

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