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The picture of provides the data of women and men who passed driving test in a country of Asian in 4 decades, from 1980 to 2010.

The picture of provides the data of women and men who passed driving test in a country of Asian in 4 decades, from 1980 to 2010. 66DYB
The picture of provides the data of women and men who passed driving test in a country of Asian in 4 decades, from 1980 to 2010. In generally, the number of women succeeded driving test was higher than that one of men of that country. To begin with, the figure of women took license driving was quite high, about 50% in 1980 and it only slightly rose in the after 10 years. That number precipitously developed to near 70%, whichi was the highest data in this period, but it unnoticeably cleclined in the last 10 years. To the contrary, the starting point of men passed driving test was smaller than that one of women 20%. It steadily grew in many years and reached to about 50% in 2000. That number was stable in the next 10 years. In spite of growing, the numbers of passing candidates of men were smaller than women in 4 decades.
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in a country of Asian in 4 decades, from 1980 to 2010.

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generally
, the
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number
of
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women
succeeded
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driving
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test
was higher than that one of
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men
of that country.

To
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begin
with, the figure of
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women
took license
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driving
was quite high, about 50% in 1980 and it
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only
slightly
rose in the after 10 years. That
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precipitously
developed to near 70%,
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was the highest data in this period,
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but
it
unnoticeably
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cleclined
in the last 10 years.

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men
passed
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driving
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test
was smaller than that one of
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women
20%. It
steadily
grew in
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many
years and reached to about 50% in 2000. That
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was stable in the
next
10 years.
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growing, the
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of passing candidates of
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were smaller than
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women
in 4 decades.
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IELTS essay The picture of provides the data of women and men who passed driving test in a country of Asian in 4 decades, from 1980 to 2010.

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