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The picture given shows manufacturing process of bricks

The picture given shows manufacturing process of bricks Q5P13
The process provides information about moulding of bricks using machines. Overall, manufacturing of bricks requires 7 consecutive steps from excavating to delivery, raw materials required are clay, sand and water. The first step involves the excavation of clay using crane. Then it has to undergo a refining process where clay is seived through a metal grid. During this stage large particles of clay is filtered into finer clay particles. In the following stage, sand and water are mixed to the clay in order to make it mouldable. The next step is moulding the mixture, it can be executed through 2 steps, either by passing the mixture through a machine with wire cutter or placing in a pre-shaped mould. The later step is to dry the moulded bricks as they are moist. Before sending them to baking they need to be dried atleast 1-2 days. Further process involves placing them into kiln 2 times, firstly at a moderate temperature of 200-980 degree C, later upto 1300 degree C maximum. As the product is too hot to handle, it is allowed to cool in a cooling chamber for atleast 2-3 days. Finally the manufactured product is packed and delivered to the consumers.
The process provides information about
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moulding
of bricks using machines.

Overall
, manufacturing of bricks requires 7 consecutive
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steps
from excavating to delivery, raw materials required are
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clay
, sand and water.

The
first
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step
involves the excavation of
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clay
using crane. Then it
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has to
undergo a refining process where
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clay
is
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seived
through a metal grid. During this stage large particles of
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clay
is filtered
into finer
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clay
particles.

In the following stage, sand and water
are mixed
to the
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clay
in order to
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make
it
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mouldable
. The
next
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step
is
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moulding
the mixture, it can
be executed
through 2
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steps
, either by passing the mixture through a machine with wire cutter or placing in a
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pre-shaped
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mould
.

The later
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step
is to dry the
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moulded
bricks as they are moist.
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Before
sending them to baking they need to
be dried
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atleast
1-2 days.

Further
process involves placing them into kiln 2 times,
firstly
at a moderate temperature of 200-980 degree C, later
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upto
1300 degree C maximum.

As the product is too hot to handle, it is
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allowed
to cool in a cooling chamber for
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atleast
2-3 days.
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Finally
the manufactured product
is packed
and delivered to the consumers.
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IELTS essay The picture given shows manufacturing process of bricks

Essay
  American English
7 paragraphs
200 words
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