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The picture below shows the bell hill farm in 1976 and the changes that took place in 2006.

The picture below shows the bell hill farm in 1976 and the changes that took place in 2006. APLbl
A glance at the two layouts exhibit the modifications which have taken place between 1976 and 2006. From the overall perception, it is immensely clear that the park converted into modernised. By adding recreation area and multimedia room. Among a myriad of alterations, one spectacular change has occurred in the north and south side. Apart from this, the cow sheds, and poultry area on east which were converted into student housing. Besides this, in north, the area where farm machinery was stored, it was replaced with car parking.
A glance at the two layouts exhibit the modifications which have taken place between 1976 and 2006.

From the
overall
perception, it is
immensely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
that the park converted into
Possible spelling mistake. 'modernised' is British English.
modernised
. By adding recreation area and multimedia room.

Among a myriad of alterations, one spectacular
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
has occurred in the north and south side. Apart from this, the cow sheds, and poultry area on east which
were converted
into student housing.
Besides
this, in north, the area where farm machinery
was stored
, it
was replaced
with car parking.
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IELTS essay The picture below shows the bell hill farm in 1976 and the changes that took place in 2006.

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  American English
3 paragraphs
88 words
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