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It is widely believed that studying a foreign language in the first year of school is more effective than in secondary school for children. Drawbacks and benefits of this topic

It is widely believed that studying a foreign language in the first year of school is more effective than in secondary school for children. Drawbacks and benefits of this topic GrdYw
Nowadays, some experts believe that it is better for children to learn a foreign language in the first year of school than in secondary school, especially in both developed and developing countries. This essay will discuss both merits and demerits of this phenomenon with relevant examples to support. On the one hand, there are at least two main drawback that studying a new language at the young age brings to. The main disadvantage is that learning multiple language in primary school can lead to children’s confusion the foreign dialect with their native tongue. As a result, they may take longer to speak fluently their mother tongue. Another negative of adding a foreign language to primary schools’ curriculum is that it can bring an extra burden on children. For example, in some countries in the world like Vietnam, the basic syllabus is quite heavy for young- aged children, so including a new language can make it more difficult, which results in children’stresses. On the other hand, primary pupils who study an additional language will achieve at least two main benefits. Children who are between five and nine years old have the capacity to memorise things better than people from other groups. Therefore, young children pick up languages much more easily than teenagers. Another plus is that studying a foreign language can enhance their perpectives which are useful for their future career. Through a language, children not only study how to achive it fluently, but also broaden their knowledge of expression, lifestyle and culture of a country. In conclusion, there are two good points and two bad ones which studying a new language bring to young-aged children. In my opinion, parent should consider carefully before letting their kids learn a foreign language.
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experts believe that it is better for
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to learn a
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foreign
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language
in the
first
year of
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than in secondary
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,
especially
in both developed and
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developing countries
. This essay will discuss both merits and demerits of this phenomenon with relevant examples to support.

On the one hand, there are at least two main drawback that studying a new
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language
at the young age brings to. The main disadvantage is that learning multiple
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language
in primary
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school
can lead to
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children’s
confusion the
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foreign
dialect with their native tongue.
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, they may take longer to speak
fluently
their mother tongue. Another
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negative
of adding a
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foreign
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language
to primary
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schools’
curriculum is that it can bring an extra burden on
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children
.
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, in
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some
countries in the world like Vietnam, the basic syllabus is quite heavy for young- aged
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children
,
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including a new
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language
can
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make
it more difficult, which results in children’
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stresses
.

On the other hand
, primary pupils who study an additional
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language
will achieve at least two main benefits.
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who are between five and nine years
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have the capacity to
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things better than
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people
from other groups.
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pick up
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languages
much more
easily
than
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teenagers
. Another plus is that studying a
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foreign
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can enhance their
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perpectives
which are useful for their future career. Through a
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,
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children
not
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only
study how to
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broaden their knowledge of expression, lifestyle and culture of a country.

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points and two
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ones which studying a new
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bring to young-aged
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children
. In my opinion, parent should consider
carefully
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before
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foreign
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language
.
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IELTS essay It is widely believed that studying a foreign language in the first year of school is more effective than in secondary school for children. Drawbacks and benefits of this topic

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  American English
4 paragraphs
290 words
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