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The person you would like to meet

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There are a lot of famous people all around the world. Every famous person had to try their best to be famous. Hence, I respect all of the famous people all around the world. I would also like to meet them in-personally. If I had a chance to meet with a person that I really admire, I would like to meet with the Prophet Mohammed. Prophet Mohammed is the founder of Islam and almost all of the Muslims across the world regard him as the leader of Islam. He is not only the best person in the world, but also the smartest person of all time. He is also a messenger of Allah. If I had the chance to meet him, I would ask him about the problem between Sunni and Shia. He is the only person who can determine who is right and who is wrong.
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IELTS essay The person you would like to meet

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
147 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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