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The person I love in family

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The person I love most in my family is my grandmother, she very young than her age. My grandmother have long and black hair and she has a bright eyes, she always considerate with everyone or keep calm in any case. Me and my grandmother usually cooking toghether, plant the tree or go to market for the meal, I really admire to her because she is a good wife, good mother also the wonderfull grandmother and I have a big respect to her when she spend all time to take care for our family
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most in my family is my
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grandmother
,
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she
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very
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young
than her age. My
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grandmother
have long and black
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hair and
she has a bright eyes,
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she
always considerate with everyone or
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calm in any case.
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Me
and my
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grandmother
usually
cooking
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toghether
, plant the tree or go to market for the meal, I
really
admire to her
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she is a
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good
wife,
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good
mother
also
the
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wonderfull
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grandmother
and I have a
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big
respect to her when she
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spend
all time to take care for our
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family
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IELTS essay The person I love in family

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
93 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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