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The percentage of overweight children in western societies has increased by almost 20% in the last ten years. Discuss the possible causes and effects of this disturbing trend and offer a solution.

The percentage of overweight children in western societies has increased by almost 20% in the last ten years. Discuss the possible causes and effects of this disturbing trend and offer a solution. 6xNYr
Food, shelter, clothes and other factors are important in a human's life. When we take humans as an example, food is the most important factor that keeps the body in stable state providing nutrients that it requires. Food has evolved in many ways. Food varies from one culture to another. It sometimes depends on tradition followed by people all over the world. Food has become industrial. It has provided a lot of work for unemployed people by giving them a decent job. Food has evolved in ways we cannot imagine. There are soo many kinds of food that we should try. We can broadly classify food into two types, namely, vegetarian and non-vegetarian. Vegetarian foods do not include meat and it's varieties. It involves green foods and those that are not meat. In today's world, most of them are non-vegetarian. As population grows, so does the need for food increases. To match the demand, supply must be increased. This supply is done by various methods that even involve adulteration of food products that are processed in industries. Nowadays, food items like pizza, burgers, sausages have a repulsive action on the health of people. This affects the metabolism of the human body and makes them obese too. Obesity and overweight have become a problem today. According to the author, the percentage of overweight children have increased by 20% in the last ten years. Such problems can affect the life of children intensely. To overcome these problems, we must try different methods to improve the portion of healthy food in children's diet. Parents must make sure that children are fed with healthy foods like pulses, nuts, grains, fruits, vegetable and many more. Being healthy must be the moto for all the children. We can state a lot of reasons for this trend. Some reasons include pizzas, burgers, ice-creams, cheese and many more. Such changes in body's metabolism will have bad effects on the health of children. Yoga, meditation, exercise will improve children's health and keeps them healthy.
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, shelter, clothes and other factors are
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important
in a human's life. When we take humans as an example,
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food
is the most
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important
factor that
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keeps
the body in stable state providing nutrients that it requires.
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Food
has evolved in
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many
ways.
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varies from one culture to another. It
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sometimes
depends on tradition followed by
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people
all over the world.
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has become industrial. It has provided
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a lot of
work for unemployed
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people
by giving them a decent job.
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has evolved in ways we cannot imagine. There are
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many
kinds of
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that we should try. We can
broadly
classify
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food
into two types,
namely
, vegetarian and non-vegetarian. Vegetarian
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foods
do not include meat and it's varieties. It involves green
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foods
and those that are not meat. In
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today
's world, most of them are non-vegetarian. As population grows,
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does the need for
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increases. To match the demand, supply
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must
be increased
. This supply
is done
by various methods that even involve adulteration of
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food
products that
are processed
in industries. Nowadays,
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food
items like pizza, burgers, sausages have a repulsive action on the health of
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people
. This affects the metabolism of the human body and
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makes
them obese too. Obesity and overweight have become a problem
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today
. According to the author, the percentage of overweight
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children
have increased by 20% in the last ten years. Such problems can affect the life of
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children
intensely
. To overcome these problems, we
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must
try
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different
methods to
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the portion of
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healthy
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in children's diet. Parents
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sure that
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like pulses, nuts, grains, fruits, vegetable and
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more. Being
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for all the
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. We can state
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reasons for this trend.
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changes
in body's metabolism will have
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bad
effects on the health of
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children
. Yoga, meditation, exercise will
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improve
children's health and
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keeps
them
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healthy
.
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IELTS essay The percentage of overweight children in western societies has increased by almost 20% in the last ten years. Discuss the possible causes and effects of this disturbing trend and offer a solution.

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