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The only way to solve the increasing crime rate of young offenders is to teach parents better parenting skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.5

The only way to solve the increasing crime rate of young offenders is to teach parents better parenting skills. v. 5
Any act that causes harm to another individual or a group of people, is considered as crime. Crimes are done with an intention to hurt someone intentionally. Crime rates of young offenders are definitely on the rise and researchers say that there has been over 52% increase in crime by younger below the age of 18. Many opine that it is solely the outcome of bad parenting and that parents need be taught better parenting skills. But, I do not totally blame them for it. We live in a time and place where society plays a major role in moulding an individual. Societal pressures have both positive and negative impact on the younger generations as they tend to take in everything like a sponge. Today’s generation is exposed to a variety of digital devices through which they can watch or share anything according to their whims and fancies. Even today’s entertainment industry has become nonchalant in screening the content they broadcast and label them as ‘U’. Genres like horror, sci-fi etc. Now show scenes of cold blooded murder, rape and other crimes and are considered as just another snippet in the movie. News broadcasting channels are no better as they show disturbing content, including videos, pictures, controversial interviews that disturb the young minds and make them ruthless. Some detractors may opine that parents have the sole control over their children and that better parenting skills would make them better children. Parents can influence the children to a certain extend and can imbibe good value system to the youngster, but other influences like friends, bad company, society, digital media also play a vital role in creating pivotal changes to the youngster’s mindset. In conclusion, I do not agree to the idea that teaching parenting skills to parents are the only way to reduce the crime rate of young offenders. However, it can be one of the steps towards achieving the goal of creating a better thought process in our younger generation.
Any act that causes harm to another individual or a group of
people
,
is considered
as
crime
.
Crimes
are done
with an intention to hurt someone
intentionally
.
Crime
rates of young offenders are definitely on the rise and researchers say that there has been over 52% increase in
crime
by younger below the age of 18.
Many
opine that it is
solely
the outcome of
bad
parenting
and that
parents
need
be taught
better
parenting
skills
.
But
, I do not
totally
blame them for it.

We
live
in a time and place where society plays a major role in
moulding
an individual. Societal pressures have both
positive
and
negative
impact on the younger generations as they tend to take in everything like a sponge.
Today
’s generation
is exposed
to a variety of digital devices through which they can
watch
or share anything according to their whims and fancies. Even
today
’s entertainment industry has become nonchalant in screening the content they broadcast and label them as ‘U’. Genres like horror, sci-fi etc.
Now
show
scenes of
cold blooded
murder, rape and other
crimes
and
are considered
as
just
another snippet in the movie. News broadcasting channels are no
better
as they
show
disturbing content, including videos, pictures, controversial interviews that disturb the young minds and
make
them ruthless.

Some
detractors may opine that
parents
have the sole control over their children and that
better
parenting
skills
would
make
them
better
children.
Parents
can influence the children to a certain
extend
and can imbibe
good
value system to the youngster,
but
other influences like friends,
bad
company
, society, digital media
also
play a vital role in creating pivotal
changes
to the youngster’s mindset.

In conclusion
, I do not
agree
to the
idea
that teaching
parenting
skills
to
parents
are the
only
way to
reduce
the
crime
rate of young offenders.
However
, it can be one of the steps towards achieving the goal of creating a
better
thought
process in our younger generation.
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IELTS essay The only way to solve the increasing crime rate of young offenders is to teach parents better parenting skills. v. 5

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330 words
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