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The only way to reduce the amount of traffic in cities today is by reducing the need for people to travel from home for work, education or shopping. To what extend do you agree or disagree? v.5

The only way to reduce the amount of traffic in cities today is by reducing the need for people to travel from home for work, education or shopping. v. 5
The congestion of vehicles on roads is called traffic. During a rush hour a lot of vehicles come out the roads, and they cannot move easily. Traffic consumes the valuable time of people, therefore, it is urgent to take step in solving the problem. We, the human, at the modern time, mostly depend on various types of vehicles for transportation. People around the world use both of private and public transports, and save their time for travelling. These, however, sometimes cause a lot of problems, and need to improve the situation. The responsible authorities should follow a number of strategies to solve the problems. For example, by restricting the number of private cars people use for their comfort and saving time, may improve the condition. Besides, online based learning, shopping opportunities and working facilities possibly lessen the problems. These approaches, although, sometimes work, but not the only solution. Along with these suggestions, the authority need to imply others too. In terms of other solutions, the authority should impose extra tax on the number of personal automobiles on the road. Besides, they should encourage the people to use the public transports. They, moreover, should increase the service and decreasing the travelling fee. The traffic police, furthermore, has to be more active during the rush hours, in particular, at the morning and evening. In conclusion, it is obvious that, vehicles are inseparable part of our daily life. People use a number of cars, according to their preferences, and creates a mass gather of automobiles on roads. This kills our valuable amount of time, therefore, the authority should implement a range of steps to improve the traffic system.
The congestion of
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vehicles
on roads
is called
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traffic
. During a rush hour
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a lot of
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vehicles
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come
out the roads, and they cannot
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move
easily
.
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Traffic
consumes the valuable
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time
of
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people
,
therefore
, it is urgent to take step in solving the problem.

We, the human, at the modern
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time
,
mostly
depend on various types of
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vehicles
for transportation.
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People
around the world
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use
both of private and public transports, and save their
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time
for travelling. These,
however
,
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sometimes
cause
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a lot of
problems, and need to
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improve
the situation.

The responsible
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authorities
should follow a
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number
of strategies to solve the problems.
For example
, by restricting the
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number
of private cars
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people
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use
for their comfort and saving
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time
, may
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improve
the condition.
Besides
, online based learning, shopping opportunities and working facilities
possibly
lessen the problems.

These approaches, although,
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sometimes
work,
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but
not the
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only
solution. Along with these suggestions, the
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authority
need to imply others too. In terms of other solutions, the
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authority
should impose extra tax on the
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number
of personal automobiles on the road.

Besides
, they should encourage the
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people
to
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use
the public transports. They,
moreover
, should increase the service and decreasing the travelling fee. The
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traffic
police,
furthermore
,
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has to
be more active during the rush hours,
in particular
,
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at the morning
and evening.

In conclusion
, it is obvious that,
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vehicles
are inseparable part of our daily life.
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People
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use
a
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number
of cars, according to their preferences, and creates a mass gather of automobiles on roads. This kills our valuable amount of
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time
,
therefore
, the
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authority
should implement a range of steps to
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improve
the
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traffic
system.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay The only way to reduce the amount of traffic in cities today is by reducing the need for people to travel from home for work, education or shopping. v. 5

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  American English
6 paragraphs
275 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
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