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The number of people who are at risk of serious health problems due to being overweight is increasing. What are the reasons for the growth in overweight people in society ? How can this problem be solved.

More and more individuals are reeling under from various critical health ailments which causes overweight is a common hassle. I will discuss the solutions despite reasons. Let us deliberate a number of problems and reasons which will leads towards a logical inference. To begin with, there are myriad of reasons to shore light upon given proclivity. Discussing the first view, the most intrinsic one is that foreign food. To justify, being fast food which causes a number of health ailments for instance high blood pressure, overweight and diabetes. Fast food is not prepared in good atmosphere as well as hygienic products which are available in this stables. To exemplify, being I am a scholar I have not time to prepare fresh meal at home. Consequently, I having a number of snacks and burgers. Owing to that reason I suffer from obesity.
More and more individuals are reeling under from various critical health ailments which causes overweight is a common hassle. I will discuss the solutions despite
reasons
.
Let
us deliberate a number of problems and
reasons
which will leads towards a logical inference.

To
begin
with, there are myriad of
reasons
to shore light upon
given
proclivity. Discussing the
first
view, the most intrinsic one is that foreign food. To justify, being
fast
food which causes a number of health ailments
for instance
high blood pressure, overweight and diabetes.
Fast
food is not prepared in
good
atmosphere
as well
as hygienic products which are available in
this
stables. To exemplify, being I am a scholar I have not time to prepare fresh meal at home.
Consequently
,
I having
a number of snacks and burgers. Owing to that
reason
I suffer from obesity.
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IELTS essay The number of people who are at risk of serious health problems due to being overweight is increasing. What are the reasons for the growth in overweight people in society? How can this problem be solved.

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  American English
2 paragraphs
141 words
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