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It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going to university. what are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

In recent times due to the spike in crime and political issues, major cities in the US are imposing "Curfew" for the protection of infrastructure and lives of innocent which are in high danger because of the voilence acts of the protestors. This essay fully agrees on the fact that teenagers are not enough mature to handle such mischevious events on their own thus an adult should be with them during late hours. To begin with, the government is concerned about the lives of the people for which these rules are created. One should obey these rules and avoid going out during a curfew. In these events police officers put the barricades all across the area, there might be gun shooting, fire and diiferent types of gases used to control the situation by the cops which might hurt the innocent people. For instance, the recent issue of Black Lives Matter leads to the destruction of historical sculptures, high rise buildings and affected 7000 lives all across the US. Moreover, teenagers could be used as a hostage if caught during the late hours by the criminals and they may hurt those children just to fulfil the demands from the government officials. Sometimes the hostage might get killed as well. For example, in 2018 at Royal bank of spain robbery 100's of lives were lost as investigating officer was trying to deviate the robbers so ultimately they bombed the bank and escaped through the tunnel. To conclude, I strongly belive that these laws are perfectly meant for the people and everyone should follow the rules during such conditions. Morover, a high risk alert should be sent to all the public to the near by towns so that they will stay inside the places where they are at the moment so as to avoid travel till the situation calms down.
In recent times due to the spike in crime and political issues, major cities in the US are imposing
"
Curfew
"
for the protection of infrastructure and
lives
of innocent which are in high
danger
because
of the
voilence
acts of the protestors. This essay
fully
agrees
on the fact that
teenagers
are not
enough
mature to handle such
mischevious
events
on their
own
thus
an adult should be with them during late hours.

To
begin
with, the
government
is concerned
about the
lives
of the
people
for which these
rules
are created
. One should obey these
rules
and avoid going out during a curfew. In these
events
police officers put the barricades all across the area, there might be gun shooting, fire and
diiferent
types of gases
used
to control the situation by the cops which might hurt the innocent
people
.
For instance
, the recent issue of Black
Lives
Matter leads to the destruction of historical sculptures, high rise buildings and
affected
7000
lives
all across the US.

Moreover
,
teenagers
could be
used
as a hostage if caught during the late hours by the
criminals and
they may hurt those children
just
to fulfil the demands from the
government
officials.
Sometimes
the hostage might
get
killed
as well
.
For example
, in 2018 at
Royal bank
of
spain
robbery 100's of
lives
were lost
as investigating officer was trying to deviate the robbers
so
ultimately
they bombed the bank and escaped through the tunnel.

To conclude
, I
strongly
belive
that these laws are
perfectly
meant for the
people
and everyone should follow the
rules
during such conditions.
Morover
, a high
risk
alert should be
sent
to all the public to the
near by
towns
so
that they will stay inside the places where they are at the moment
so as to
avoid travel till the situation calms down.
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IELTS essay It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going to university. what are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
307 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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