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The number of older people is expected to increase than the youngsters in the future is it a postive or negative development

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It is predicted to have a surge in the proportion of elderly grey population over youth in upcoming years this essay will explicate the negative growthTo inaugurate economic downfall is the most prominent cause behind considering a growth of elderly population as a negative development provided that tries independent population led to shortage of labour as a consequence decline in nation productivity is predictable to elaborate all the elders deemed to have integrity together with experience but week health would not permit them to even on their own leaving their effort to run a nation young the nation has been highly contributing Korea for instance managed to gain ranks second for the third time in overall economic growth as published by w h o in 2019. On the other hand lack of young brains together with strength would be a negative development as it will not only affect countries defence system due to lack of energetic as well as bold as aspirants but also the overall rate of healthy population to support it is rightly said strength is for better than a weapon does if the present age of youth outrace elderly maximum soldiers would be these to fight with terrorism and other social issues to epic from Afghanistan have been acquired by taleban is recent example is treating the importance of young and bold generation to conclude despite being highly respected and admired grey population can not sure their Nation to a required extent as youth might do as a result highly adderley ratio would affect Nation negatively
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is predicted
to have a surge in the proportion of elderly
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grey
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population
over youth in upcoming years this essay will explicate the
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negative
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growthTo
inaugurate economic downfall is the most prominent cause behind considering a growth of elderly
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population
as a
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negative
development provided that tries independent
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population
led to shortage of
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labour
as a consequence decline in
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nation
productivity is predictable to elaborate all the elders deemed to have integrity together with experience
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but
week health would not permit them to even on their
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own
leaving their effort to run a
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nation
young the
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nation
has been
highly
contributing Korea
for instance
managed to gain ranks second for the third time in
overall
economic growth as published by w h o in 2019.
On the other hand
lack of young brains together with strength would be a
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negative
development as it will not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
affect countries
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defence
system due to lack of energetic
as well
as bold as aspirants
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
the
overall
rate of healthy
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population
to support it is
rightly
said strength is for better than a weapon does if the present age of youth outrace elderly maximum soldiers would be these to fight with terrorism and other social issues to epic from Afghanistan have
been acquired
by
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taleban
is recent example is treating the importance of young and bold generation
to conclude
despite being
highly
respected and admired
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grey
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population
can not sure their
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Nation
to a required extent as youth might do
as a result
highly
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adderley
ratio would affect
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Nation
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negatively
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IELTS essay The number of older people is expected to increase than the youngsters in the future is it a postive or negative development

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
258 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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