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After graduating from high school, I had a trip planned with my best buddy to an amusement park.

After graduating from high school, I had a trip planned with my best buddy to an amusement park. B7AE6

After graduating from high school, I had a trip planned with my best buddy to an amusement park. However, because my house is so far away, I can only come here for a brief time and play a few games. First, I spent the morning with my pals playing adventure games like speedboats and flying boats, but I must warn you that these games are not for the faint of heart. In addition, it was noon, so I had lunch with my friends and the meals my mother cooked for us because the food at the amusement park was highly expensive. Finally, we watched Dolphins, a colorful four-season festival show. The fruit models, such as mango and grapefruit, were large and nearly 3m tall, which impressed me; after watching, I also went home because it was already evening. After that trip, I felt that day was wonderful, and what I enjoyed most was watching the colorful 4-season festival program of my hometown's fruits, and I hope to return to the amusement park.

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