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The news is an important source of knowledge for all of us about the world especially in this era of technology Journalists are mainly responsible to bring this news to us but not all of them are true to their responsibilities and ethics How much can we t v.1

The news is an important source of knowledge for all of us about the world especially in this era of technology Journalists are mainly responsible to bring this news to us but not all of them are true to their responsibilities and ethics How much can we t v. 1
Technological development is taking place rapidly these days. Some would have argued developing these reduce the percentage of criminal acts. While on the other group of people put their argument by saying that instead of lowering crime rates these advancements in technology will make the criminal activities higher. I believe these developing tendencies in technology have contributed a lot for the decrease of criminal activities. To begin with, a number of cyber crimes are rapidly taking place due to the invention and implementation of technological items. By using the hidden cameras these days, individuals are capturing the private moment of others. The perpetrator, who does so, is found to be blackmailing by threatening to explore the privacy of others which are often shameful to see such as sexual intimacy. Therefore, the criminal continuously enforces the innocent person to do in terms of their interest like the victims are being compelled to give money. That is the reason why it has been seen that crimes are taking place with the support of the technologies. However, it cannot be denied that instilments of these technologies have created terror among the criminal to involve more in such activities such as CCTV Camera on roads or shops. On the other hand, because of the installation of these items, many criminal minds think the outcome a thousand times before attempting to harm others, as the cameras can easily capture the robbery or murder in the places. For instance, in Australia, nearly 45 percent, robberies in public places have been reduced, after putting the cameras, and the complaints seem to have less in comparison to that in the past. Thus, the technologies have proven their contribution in reduction the crime rate due to their smartest features. In conclusion, these inventions have found to be more effective to reduce the crime rates, because of their effectiveness to create a terror among the criminal minds.
Technological development is taking
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these days.
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would have argued developing these
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reduce
the percentage of
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criminal
acts.
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on the
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other
group of
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people
put their argument by saying that
instead
of lowering
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crime
rates these advancements in
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technology
will
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make
the
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criminal
activities higher. I believe these developing tendencies in
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technology
have contributed a lot for the decrease of
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criminal
activities.

To
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begin
with, a number of cyber
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crimes
are
rapidly
taking
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place
due to the invention and implementation of technological items. By using the hidden
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cameras
these days, individuals are capturing the private moment of others. The perpetrator, who does
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so
,
is found
to be blackmailing by threatening to explore the privacy of others which are
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often
shameful to
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see
such as sexual intimacy.
Therefore
, the
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criminal
continuously
enforces the innocent person to do in terms of their interest like the victims are
being compelled
to give money.
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the reason why it has been
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seen
that
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crimes
are taking
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place
with the support of the
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technologies
.
However
, it cannot
be denied
that
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instilments
of these
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technologies
have created terror among the
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criminal
to involve more in such activities such as CCTV
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Camera
on roads or shops.

On the
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other
hand,
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because
of the installation of these items,
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many
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criminal
minds
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think
the outcome a thousand times
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before
attempting to harm others, as the
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cameras
can
easily
capture the robbery or murder in the
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places
.
For instance
, in Australia,
nearly
45 percent, robberies in public
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places
have been
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reduced
, after putting the
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cameras
, and the complaints seem to have less
in comparison
to that in the past.
Thus
, the
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technologies
have proven their contribution in reduction the
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crime
rate due to their smartest features.

In conclusion
, these inventions have found to be more effective to
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reduce
the
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crime
rates,
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because
of their effectiveness to create a terror among the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
criminal
minds.
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IELTS essay The news is an important source of knowledge for all of us about the world especially in this era of technology Journalists are mainly responsible to bring this news to us but not all of them are true to their responsibilities and ethics How much can we t v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
317 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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